... how did lily not notice it was a DOG bite? xD if THAT'S the case what sort of hicky's have THEY been giving eachother?

I just love that they have a time out corner

Wow, that was really good. In character and funny and romantic and everything. Good job :)

Aahhh, Sirius is such a sadist, laughing at Jamesypoo's pain, really cute. I love Lily's freaking out and Marlene's reactions. I wonder when Lily's going to find out about their Animagi...*hint hint*

So sweet. Aww!

-Kath

Oh yeah. XD Go Lily! I was kinda hoping she'd be more pissed than that... but I also didn't want her to be, cuz they're so cute!

- Chris

The idea of James having a "hickey" from Sirius is pretty funny. It was a cute read.

Two things, though:

1. You can convey yelling without writing in all caps. Italics work well, I think.

And 2. Sirius is portrayed as childish at parts. It's something to try to avoid in the future.

Keep writing!

Aw... cute. Even though if I had been Lily I would have found difficult to believe that SIRIUS had bitten James. I mean, can you picture him doing that?

Aw how sweet :)

so sweet and funny. i couldnt stop laughing at ALL! sirius's love bite.. ahaha

"And she's probably named something sexy like Brianna or Ali or something like that!"

*rolls on the floor, laughing*

You, madam, have a very special place in my heart.

Of course Sirius was laughing hysterically at the matter? What sensible person wouldn't be...from a safe distance away, of course. Kind of like the safe distance I am away from the Marauders, laughing at them for having a time-out corner. But not a safe distance away from you, the author, because I don't think you'll mind knowing that I found this story to be funny.

so sweet and funny and totally random! i loved it! especially the parts about the time out corner and lily freaking out! great job!

That was cute. Really dramatic, I loved when Sirius gets in trouble. But it was a little childish, but it was intended that way, I'm sure.

Heiress

cute and so hilarious!