You know she seems like she has the ability if it came to it to turn into a version off coal but anyway awesome job and thanks for the chapter

I like it so far it's interesting

pretty interesting, the ending was a nice one, well written overall. good job.

Nicely done and a good idea. To be frank, the ending feels abrupt and I'm left feeling unsatisfied with it. In fact, it doesn't seem like an end at all. If you don't decide to turn it into a multi-chapter, I would suggest making it a two-shot to at least give it a proper ending.

Unless this references the ending of DA:I or the Trespasser DLC. In which case ignore me, I haven't finished either.