I take it back... -_-
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MORE, NOW! ONE PIECE! YYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH!

AND OF COURSE ONE OF MY STORIES IS SIMILAR TO THIS! (No offense.)

You're a really good writer so I can't imagine why you don't get more reviews... I love this story so far especially because Fox is a main character and even though he's not as much like his Starfox self you represent him very well. Being a full on Starfox fan, I'm not quite as familiar with the other characters, but the story is very well thought out and detailed. Understandably, your updates take a while so you kind of get lost at first when you pick back up where you left, especially if you've read other things during that time, just because there is so much going in. That's not a bad thing, but did you consider putting brief recaps of what's happened recently or of a specific point that was crucial to the story at the beginnings of new chapters? Keep up the awesome work!

Wow, in spite of the fact that there are eighteen chapters of this, the review count has only reached to the number four, which surprises me. You probably already know why, but a possible explanation to this is that it's not about the ones who get the most attention... or rather, too much attention... a lot... (The humans) I mean, if the main character of this were to be Marth, Link, or Ike, this story would get lots more.

I'm glad you did not decide to choose one of them, not just because of what I said above, but also that Fox happens to be my favorite video game character... yet, I have only played one game of his series. (Good thing it's finally getting a new game next year, though for the Wii U.)

I think I'm talking a bit too much here, so let me get on with my review.

"The snow continued to kiss the ground lightly..." I can already tell that you have a writing style that's quite interesting to glance at. Lines like these can teach readers a thing or two if they want to improve their own.

Further on, as I pictured the events in my mind, I really love the relationship between Fox and Falco. A great example of what it should be, instead of them hating each other with a blazing passion, unless the reason behind it is logical. But the worst case scenario of all those yaoi fics... (Don't even get me started...)

Now time for a bit of criticism here. "Guards, men dressed in these white suits, guns and batons at their sides, rushed to the cells and dragged prisoners out. Fox held onto the bars, witnessing what had been going on before him." Since you are writing in past tense, 'these' should have been replaced by 'those'. You don't want your readers to be confused on if you are writing in past or present tense.

"Hey sleepy head. You're finally awake?" Even though I've never played the game yet, from the five minutes I watched (unless I am wrong), I can infer that you are describing a scene from The Legend of Zelda: Ocarina of Time. Now it's time for me to think of what this has to do with the plot, other than the fact that it is simply a dream. Guess I'll find out in the next chapter, it ending off with screams that can be heard from Fox, that were actually coming from the vulpine himself. Nice touch, there.

I may not review a lot of chapters in one day, but I will favorite and follow this to show you that I'm reading.

I'm guessing the two guys at the end were Master Hand and Crazy Hand, as humans. I'm still crying. That's an accomplishment. Not a lot can make me cry. Write On!

I already cried. Poor Fox...poor Falco...

Is the card-throwing guy Gambit or something

God, I'm shocked no one reviewed this yet. I'm a bit baffled by that. I think this story is awesome and Fox McCloud is one of my all-time favorite Nintendo characters! You're a talented writer and u deserve a review for this and hopefully more to come! Keep up the good work! I love this story! XD