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Sucks that you discontinued this, but there really isn't anything that could be done.

you should have put crossdressing on that profile :/

This is a GREAT chapter!

Is Hakuno an OC?

And I didn't understand the previous chapters Author's Note. I could tell that they were words, but the meaning escaped me.

This is fun. Gimme MOAR! MOAR! :3

Followed. I hope you update.

Interesting concept

As an argument for Hakuno's magecraft: he was an NPC based of an existing person, that somehow gain self-awarness. From what I understand, Zelretch healed the original, and granted him the memories of the NPC, which sounds a lot like what happens with Heroic Spirits. Anyway, you have to ask yourself, why would the Moon Cell copy an existing being to create an NPC if that person didn't have Magus blood?

This is great. Well written, a good laugh here and there, not rushed, good grammar, realistic dialogue. I honestly am having trouble finding something bad to say. How about... it isn't longer? Also, when you say "release", does that mean Archer will be removed from the Throne? Or just his Guardianship? After all, Archer's legend was great enough that he achieved the Throne independently, but had made a deal with Alaya for power in life, and thus, was a Counter Guardian.

i actually quite like this. archer as the main fighter and protecting hakuno. after all its unusual to have a male being protected by another male character. i like their friendship and master servant relationship so breaking that apart by making hakuno a strong campione seems a bit detrimental to the story.
please update! love your archer! i cant wait to see the reactions of others of a "heretic god" that calls a mortal "master". so funny!

I Think The heretic gods that Hakuno should deal with be: Amaterasu what being in Japan first or Nobunaga Oda the demon king of the sixth heaven.

I Think The heretic god that HAKUNO defeat to become a campione should be demon archer aka job Nobunaga Oda. And the Aurthority gain from her should be noble phantasm Three Thousand Worlds it's a anti-army it is very good against those who have high divinity and mystery.

love the reactions to the Master/Servant relationship, so outside of anyone in Campione 'verse's experience. Quasi deity calling a mortal master indeed!

Interesting idea. I love it! There are a number of ways you can go with this. But I'm not sure about the campoine option. Wouldn't that make him overshadow his servant? There is also having the master become something else like a divine ancestor? Or a witch? Or any a number of things. But being support is one thing he can do. Look forward to seeing what you come up with!#!

a campione is a human that stole the power of a god, could that power be given instead. or instead if in a world untouched by Gaia Archer give him something that would make him strong enough to matter such as a noble phantasm would either idea work.

Well people in campioneverse channel magic through their bodies, so if Hakuno could figure out how to do that he could do his code casting.