This was a really great story with a novel idea behind it. There were a couple of silly spelling mistakes but overall that and the grammar was so good that it was a delight to read. You really GOT Shep and Liara but I thought Jarvik was too easy on them. I would have loved it if they could have fixed EDI at the end to. Please write more!

This is a great story. I found it back in June, but didn't take the time to read it... then forgot about it. Then you published Alchera. Read it and needed more context so I sat down to read this. That was a number of hours ago, and now I'm writing my review after hitting the end. Excellent story, great premise, good plot development. Nice to see Javik have hope of a future with his own kind and I'm all about the happy ending for Liara and Shepard. Just overall very well done. Bravo!

Beautiful, wonderful story. One of the absolute best Liara/FShep I've read. Thank you so much for writing and sharing this with us :)

- Yuri

You are a brilliant author. I tip my hat off to you and the beautiful, wonderfully-crafted stories you've written and shared with us all. Thank you :3

Yay, Hannah likes Liara! :D (but then of course who wouldn't :3)

This is just such a beautiful, poignant, well-written story. I love it so much :3

*claps in delight* Oh, this chapter was so great! :D

Brought together only to be broken apart...again *sigh* What are we ever going to do with these two XDD

Nioce! ;3

*warbles happily* Yaaaaay :3

Protective Shepard off to the rescue! :D

I wish my relationship with my GF was like this :/ TT

Ugh! I just finished playing through the ME series with liara romanced all the way through and this is exactly what I needed! I couldn't bear Shepard's last moment with liara, you have provided me closure. Excellent job! Thank you!

wow...

first things first, sixty thousand words is a lot of words to put in one chapter. They were nicely distributed and used well, but there were quite a lot of them. It made reading this a bit more difficult because I had to hunt around to find my place when I came back to it. That sometimes meant unintentionally reading spoilers, and on other occasions it meant re-reading content. The second task was not tedious because of the aforementioned well-used words. The first was a mild irritant. still... chapters.

Second things second, your mechanics were good. a few missed words, obvious "MSWord" substitutions, and the occasional homonym. Grammar, sentence structure and presentation were all well done. you used the language well and I never had to go back and re-read something trying to figure out what I missed. Except when I was looking for my place... did I mention chapters? ;)

The plot was well thought out. I liked the way you portrayed the politics of the situation and the villain made perfect sense in the context of the ME story/universe. The overall arc was well paced and the subplots wove in and out of the main narrative seamlessly.

Your characters were familiar and believably evolved from where they were at the end of the game. Everyone was in voice and consistent. Shepard's emotional pain and self doubt were also believable as was her eventual self-realization. You managed some very emotional moments (One that stands out is the dream sequence where Shepard must confront those who had fallen) and some humorous moments as well. (Ashley- "I can't believe you actually said 'with all due respect'.")

So, now to the nit-picking... (everyone can find a nit to pick. I am no exception.) Shepard's recovery seemed very fast. After nine months in a coma, you don't wake up and head off on a mission after a couple of days. Not even if you're Commander Shepard. I know she did it at the beginning of ME2 and I understand why you timed it that way, but I think you could have made it a more realistic without losing the subplot that went with it.
The Protheans' motive was made clear but their plan was cartoonish. There were many unanswered questions about it starting with "how did they know what was going on in the galaxy?" Without the answer to that question, the rest of their plot is pretty much "Magic Prothean Stuff."

Overall, I found this to be a very nice addition to my view of the ME-verse and I enjoyed reading it very much.

-Alex.

This is an interesting story that is well written and had thought behind it. Well done on that!
Just one small note, I haven't clicked to find out if you have done other stories or not yet as i still haven't finished this behemoth of a chapter, but it would be nice for possible future stories if you split it up a little.

Thanks for the Story!