I realise that at this point this story has probably been abandoned, but i would be ecstatic if you continued it!

Please update story is getting good

Awesome

Please keep going.

Mrr... There are quite a few spelling mistakes in the summary, and some in the chapter, too. It made it rough to read for me - I'd suggest getting a beta, if you don't have one.

Honestly, Kili and Fili go together you can't have one without the other its just weird

I like The story! It's just one thing i can't get a grip on, in The goblin town Calla was about to be killed and seconds afterwards she giggles at Fili. I don't find that very likley unless she was hysterical. Well apart from those moodchanges great story! Please update

Just wanted to say I am really enjoying your story. I'm looking forward to more chapters. Please update soon

PRACTICING WITH A BOW?!

SEVERE INTERNAL INJURY! SEVERE INTERNAL INJURY! SEVERE INTERNAL INJURY!

When someone has significant damage to their midsection (ribs and lungs) they should NOT be using a bow, which requires tensing of muscles and movement of LUNGS which would then hurt her RIBS. And she's standing on her broken ankle again? Haven't you ever heard of self induced lameness? When a person has a broken foot or something, doesn't stop standing on it or using it, and making the injury so bad it doesn't heal right, and leaves them with a permanent limp?

Please consider a re-write and repairing what issues I've brought up. I know that the story is a *romance* but you've penned that and forgotten near everything else that's been happening.

Dear The Kid ...
First off I would like to thank you for looking at my story. I do appreciate all and any readers and I take criticism of my work seriously. However I do fail to see why if my story offends you so much, you continue to read it? Ordinarily I would let this go, but spamming my inbox with negative reviews isn't exactly the most ideal thing in the world while i'm trying to work on three university projects.

If you don't like my work please kindly stop reading it and posting negativity. I have plenty of readers who enjoy my work. If it is not for you, feel free to find something else that is more to your taste.

Yours
Little Green Leprechaun

Holy $#it! She has intensive injuries to both her ankle and midsection! No self respecting medical professional would dress her up and bring her to a rowdy shindig with dwarves in attendance! One elbow to the chest and she'll be choking to death on her blood!

If somebody had a broken leg, collapsed lung and cracked ribs, guess what wouldn't happen in a hospital? Forcing them to go to the cafeteria to eat with all the less injured people! What if she slipped and fell? They'd be liable for that!

Well, at least Thorin is showing some sense of being a little put off by her stupidly waifly actions.

WOW. I could hear the anti-feminism gods screaming from the words! The "ah, i broke my ankle! save me big strong men!" was a lovely touch. Can't forget the delightful moment when she just waited to die when she tripped, how delightfully independent and strong. Ooh, and that stellar moment when she just stood there and stared at Kili like a slack jawed neanderthal when wargs and orcs were closing in on them and of course since she just stood there, she ended up getting bitten near in half!

If I was thorin I would leave her in Rivendell, and I definitely wouldn't allow such a dolt to pursue a relationship with my nephew.

update asap

I like your story, but just out of curiosity, wouldn't it be impossible for Calla to sprain her ankle if she is a Hobbit? I was under the impression that that sort of thing didn't happen to Hobbits because their feet and legs were so strong.
Your story is amazing though, I really like it. :)

I like. Update