Cute. :) thank you for the story.

thanks.

I've always found Azula's destruction to be rather tragic. And it is. Even better, you did a great job portraying her: Her insanity, irrationality, hallucinations, volatile temper... In any case, I never liked her much, but somehow you made it so that the reader can sympathize with her. She's fallen far from grace, no longer the manipulative, cunning, powerful royal but a broken young girl.

I especially liked the motif "Azula always lies." As Zuko repeats this to himself, I can't help but feel sorry for him because he is suffering too. You've illustrated both siblings' sadness very well. Great job!

great

Alright, let's get this review started, yes? First off, the idea of the story itself: I liked it. I'm always a big fan of expanding upon canonical events in fics that are written well, and this one was no exception. It was really cool to see your own thoughts of what happened to Azula after the series ended, something that I'm fairly certain hasn't been touched upon yet in Korra. Regardless, it was still a neat idea, and I enjoyed it very much.

That being said, there were lots of comma errors in there that I picked up upon. Yeah, I know, I'm nitpicky, but I couldn't help but notice a lot of the missing little marks while I was reading through your story, which distracted me from getting into it as much as I could have. In general, most of the mistakes were using periods instead of commas inside a quote when it is followed by a speaking verb (such as 'he said' or 'she yelled.') A few examples of this include:

"Oh." Zuko said, lapsing back into silence.

"But why Zula? I just want to talk with you." Zuko said, inching closer.

"No Zula; you're the liar." he said, before wrapping his strong arms around her.

Then there were missing commas when one character was addressing another.

"Get out of here Zuko! (Comma needed after 'here'.)

"It's okay Zula," (Comma needed after 'okay'.)

"I-I hate you Zuzu. (Comma needed after 'you'.)

...And so on and so forth. There were much more of those missing commas than there were of accidentally using a period instead of a comma in quotes FYI, so if you decide to go through and edit it a bit be on the lookout for those and commas in general.

Overall though, I thought it was a pretty nice story. It was a nice length, had a good shift in style, and conveyed emotion to the reader very well throughout its entirety. Yeah, you had some minor grammar stuff (those darn commas, haha), but overall I think you did a really nice job with it.

GUH! You are incredible! I feel like I am just sitting here stunned, my mouth hanging open! Your words are so beautiful, you have an incredible way of describing the situation in depth, yet keeping me interested with each word.

"More daggers sliced through him, each white hot. Their burns lingered. The Fire Lord extinguished his flame in shock at the words."
This was probably my favorite line, it has such a powerful impact, while still being beautifully stated.

You are an amazing and talented writer, don't ever let anyone tell you differently!

It took me a little bit of time to get into this, but I think that is only because I am not familiar with the fandom. As I read on, I was drawn more and more into the story and the characters, but the point where it really began to grip me, was when the title came into play the first time: "Azula always lies"

The repetition of this mantra made the story from that on, very compelling and griping. Both because of the rhythm those words created, and the insight this mantra gave into both Azula and Zuko, and their relationship.

Really well done.

Hey! Great story! I really enjoyed the idea behind it as Azula is a character that never fails to fascinate me. You have a very clear way of writing that is concise and effective, but at times I felt like there might have been more telling then showing. Overall, a really great piece with a really interesting main theme. I will definitely be checking out your other stuff.

This is a nice foray into Zuko's life after they overthrow the fire lord. I always wondered what happened to Azula. It's also nice to see that no matter how much pain his family made him suffer, Zuko is still loyal.
Short and concise, I like that you didn't try to throw too much detail in or drag the whole affair out very long. Sometimes less is more and you definitely seem to have a handle of that idea.

I'm not familiar with the fandom, but I found your story very interesting and engaging. The way you pictured Azula was very vivid; your reader could really picture the two sides of her, the manipulative, brilliant Azula her brother remembered, and the broken woman he could see now. We could really feel his pain, and that he was at a loss - but also that even from the start, it had been difficult to deal with Azula… Her unhinged behaviour was very insightfully shown, extremely sad, it made me pity her also she was being aggressive and wild. It was obvious that she was so lost… I also liked the way you pointed out that her surroundings weren't pleasant at all, and the way you stressed the importance of appearances for Zuko. He always had to remain in control and to refrain from showing weakness, yet the sight of his sister and the state of her hit him hard and deep. That's another contrast you handled very well. Great job!

This is amazing. Wonderfully written and characterization is absolutely flawless. Your descriptions are excellent. Pace, voice, tone, and dialogue are perfect. Nothing sounds too OOC or forced at all. This is the Azula and Zuko moment I've been waiting for. I would’ve loved to see this become cannon.

This was a really awesome story! I always love Azula, so this was a really unique look at her, showing that deep down, through all her madness, that she really loved Zuko. I'd never have guessed to put her into an asylum, but it makes sense. She was kind of crazy. And I really loved that every time she swore that she hated Zuko, you reminded us that Azula always lies. I think Zuko would have to believe that or he'd have been done with her years ago...and as a mature and wise fire lord, he realizes he can't because she's family and his sister. This was a really good story! I really enjoyed it.

One minor error: There are missing commas. Remember when one character a addresses another, there should be a comma before or after his or her name, depending on where it falls in the sentence. Overall, nice job though. :)

This is great - It really showcases the emotional turmoil that Zuko is experiencing. I really love his character. He's complex. I think you did a good job capturing that here.
I like the repetition. The chant, and title, is eerie and unsettling, especially after its origins are revealed. It's an interesting contrast when Zuko thinks about himself in practically the same position as Azula is now.
Now, they've switched places. Azula certainly is a strong character in the show, so it is definitely disturbing to see her in this state.
In the end, the chant is what keeps him getting up and leaving, I think.
I nice depressing ending, too ;) Nice work!

As someone who isn't at all familiar with this fandom, I must applaud your ability to make me understand what's going on. Your tone, your descriptions, and your dialogue all do wonders to carry the reader along.

Azula's characterization is just so sad. Zuko's reaction really made the entire piece for me because he still loves his sister so much, even with her mind gone like it is now.

I also really liked the liberal sprinkling of the title towards the end. It really hits the whole point of the piece home and really ties it together nicely.

Overall, this was a really enjoyable oneshot! Beautifully done!

Cheers!

Well. This was interesting. I'm sorry I can't comment much on how the characterisations were since I've never really watched Avatar (though I do know a few odd bits and pieces about it), but I can say that, taking my ignorance into consideration, you've done more than a good job to show the reader the characters roles and some of the qualities in their personas.

Now, the feel. This is sad. It always is when someone with a great deal of pride ends up... like Azula is here, or something similar. It's sad and just utterly horrible, and not just for someone in Zuko's position; someone who has to witness the Fall (let's call it that). Because, when you think more about it, you really don't want to become like that yourself. No, you don't.

Otherwise, you writing was good - it flowed very nicely. The end seemed a little scattered though. I think that's mostly 'cause of the way you had arranged your sentences and paragraphs. For the most part it was alright, since this is an important moment and should be recognised as one. There is something like too much importance - if you make every single sentence important enough to garner their own paragraph, the whole text and the /really/ important parts lose that very thing you're trying to imply, and the whole formatting just becomes annoying.

Anyway, if you want an example then: "'Get off me! Get off me! I hate you! I hate your guts! Now get off me!'", and the following, "The princess swatted at his chest feebly, almost as if she weren't trying to get Zuko to stop hugging her.", would work better as a single paragraph, since the two are a part of the dialogue and the description connected to that dialogue. The same could be said about, "Zuko only hugged her tighter, causing her to break down.", and, "'I-I hate you Zuzu. I do.'", though with this latter one it isn't as... obvious. (My nitpicking self, so please ignore if you want.)

The somewhat-opposite is needed after the period in, "-some of that teenage eagerness still existed. 'Well, I wouldn't say that Azula is-" as there are two different... meanings and importances in that one paragraph. One is the change and maturity that Zuko has gained, even when he still is the "same" Zuko. The other one is the answer, the facts of how Azula is faring and what is it exactly that has made the doctor so tired. Plus, the subject/actor changes, which I think is enough for anyone to press that Enter key.

Grammatically and spelling-wise there was nothing great to fault you with. ("'Thank-you doctor for allowing-" Thank you is not one word, so you should take off the dash. Also, you should add commas to either side of the word "doctor" since it's used as a... how would I put it, as a name/title, and if it were to be taken off, the meaning of the sentence wouldn't change at all.)

All in all, you've done a very good job of writing this. I enjoyed reading it.