Started amazing then got weird with Bella acting like a baby ... not sure if I should stick

This was a lovely ride!
Thanks for sharing _

super great xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Thank you for fading to black. I did not want to read Billy/Tanya banging.

LMAO. Oh my god. I am deceased.
TWO HEADS ARE BETTER THAN ONE!
You're my favourite person today.

I hate Alice and it soothes my hatred filled soul to read this chapter. I'm half in love with this angry Jasper who says all the things I wished he would have said in canon. 3

Huge blocks of text are ridiculously difficult to read.
I prefer showing over telling and this is quite a lot in terms of telling.
I do hope it improves.

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh! Bella is so CUTE!

Sumo:

I am guessing that she is feeling the mating pull but has no idea what it is at her mental just knows she likes him.
I imagine she is at the three to four year old stage right now.

Me:*readsNo Aliss, no Ehdee, no ucky!immediately thinks of that one tik tok videosprays air freshener in airsays* BEGONE THOTS! GO AWAY! I'M A MAN OF GODDD! HAAAAAAAAAAAUUUUHH! *dies laughing*

It's not right to blame others by the way we feel. Both Bella and Jasper here seems to have a victim complex

I actually prefer the "fade to black.'

monkaS

I love this story in ways I didnt expect.