I enjoyed it very much. Especially, the part where Evan saved Amy. :) Great story!

That's was beautiful. I want more, I really do. You got me so caught up in this story I forgot I had fries on and I burned them. Almost burned the house down, but it was sooooo worth it.

*Claps excitedly!* I've always loved your Lorne stories... and have wanted you to write one where Lorne's wife ends up on Atlantis. Nice work, loved the character development and the extent that Lorne went to save her. Keep it up!

That was a very, vvery sweet ending! Loved it~

"I understand what you're trying to show me General. But there are degrees in everything. Isn't there a way to reward the good while still setting an example for the bad?"

Actually, there is the possibility that he could be cleared of the charges but it will stay on his record and promotions may be hard to get going forward. I have seen the military clear someone of a charge of say a class B felony but if that soldier disobeyed a DIRECY ORDER, that one ALWAYS sticks because you have to maintain discipline in a military setting. If soldier A defied an order NOW when there's no combat, what's he/she going to do when things start going South?

Yes, the last two chapters were implausible, but if they made YOU happy, then I say, have at it!

Remember: To thine own self be true...and everyone else can just kiss your...grits!

Don't wait to long to get your next story up, por favor.

~Sandy

"How long have you been married?" Lam continued.

"Not long enough," he murmured.

Now THAT is very IC for Lorne. *happy sigh!* I wish there was someone like that for be beside an elderly cat. (she's only glad to see me because I feed and let her get in my lap when she wants to.)

I do have to admit that the circumstances of the story are not very plausible. But who cares? It's a sweet and beautiful story showing just how far a man might go for the woman he loves.

I'm setting an alert for your next story. Don't make me wait too long, please.

~Sandy

I loved this!

well just catching up...

love this evan..and how he loves her...and love the ending

thanks for sharing this story with us

hugs

*fans self* Oh, to be greeted in that way by that man. Mmm. Yummy.

Yowza! Twice in one chapter. I think I'm gonna faint!

the highest powers,

in lonely hours

the tears devour you.

Words no one should have to feel empathy with. Too bad we can't eliminate sadness and bitterness and hatred. (Am I being to blatant? Thorry!)

Great as always,

Sandy

Oh MAN! This is NOT happening...

I would have punched the wall THEN gone to the gym to beat up a couple of Marines.

Rut Roh! They found the bomb! What now for our intrepid explorers?

And so kind of John to send that note to Lorne's sweetie. She is not gonna be happy!

"I hope there won't be any major repercussions over the delay in getting you home."

Hehe! There'd be *coughs at pun* major repercussions for Lorne if it were me he was coming home to. But the good kind!

"Striding to the CD player, Lorne pressed the skip button firmly, cutting the song to an abrupt ending. His actions had everyone in the Mess looking at him – surprised, curious, concerned."

Very OOC for the always-in-control Major. Poor thing.

Still going good!

Okay. One particular spot had me ROFLMAL:

"Lorne already had the sense that being called in to facilitate his CO's return to Atlantis could turn into a full time job all on its own."

Oh, Evan...if you only knew what was in store for you!

I WANT THIS RING!

"A ring, small, made of a metal that looked like a cross between platinum and gold. An intensely blue stone of some kind, small but clearly visible, was set into the top and surrounded by carved symbols. It was simple and yet complex – it looked strong but also delicate enough that it wouldn't swamp a woman's finger."

Reed and Coughlin didn't get into trouble while there, did they? No problems with the local wildlife? ;-)

Off to read the next chapter!

So what can I say about this chapter that hasn't been said before? It was more than entertaining seeing everyone's favorite 2IC in love with the girl he had to leave behind. It explains why he never dated. He's never been the love 'em and leave 'em kind.

He's military and you do what you have to do, go where you're told to go. If you aren't ready to do that and the people you care about aren't ready to support you, then its not the life for you or them.

I'll try to finish the entire six chapters today but no guarantees.

(I was supposed to get author alerts for you but there's been a snafu at FF...again.)

Keep up the great work, my Down Under Friend!

~Sandy Lake

I was disappointed in the last two chapters of this story because it held such great promise...

Chapter 5

Not only is it totally implausible that he would be able to sneak his near death wife out of the ICU but also being able to sneak her into what is probably one of the highest security military facilities in CONUS? Not going to happen.

While I can see Evan asking for Sam's help with Amy's situation, I cannot see him threatening her with an M-16 unless he was possessed by aliens. (Which I'm assuming for the duration of Chapters 5 & 6 he is not.) Also I'm pretty sure that the missing technologies would be noticed pretty quickly because of the security measures that are in place at the SGC.

Sam to me acted very OOC by not notifying anyone that there was a possible security breach when Lorne threatened her.

There is also the issue of how very difficult it would have been to move somebody in Amy's condition easily and safely from the ICU to the car to the SGC. It would have been nearly impossible for Evan to move her and also monitor her condition (ie- vital signs, breathing, etc) to make sure that she stayed alive for the duration of the trip (and what would really be the point of breaking into the mountain if by the time he got her there she was already dead?)

Also Caroline would have probably required that more than just she and Sam be present for the use of the Goa'uld hand device because it would be very difficult for her alone to monitor Amy.

However I did appreciate the bit with him sitting at her bedside as he is a very loyal person and wouldn't want to leave her.

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Chapter 6

The chapter opened with promise of a plausible wrap up that would be both satisfying and appropriate given the grave misconduct committed in the last chapter. Unfortunately it was unable to deliver that end.

The thing that rankled me the most about this chapter was twofold- the fact that despite breaking OPSEC in a most spectacular way Evan receives no more than a slap on the wrist, and Amy not only gets an NDA but a contract to Atlantis.

First off- despite being a natural gene carrier which are in high demand for the city for having violated the OPSEC of the SGC (and therefore quite possibly putting the nation, actually the WORLD in great danger) Evan still would receive more than just a slap on the wrist (in this case being stuck as Major for a while and whatnot). He more than likely would have received at the VERY least a letter of reprimand on his service file, if not a reduction in at least pay grade for a while. If not even being demoted back to Captain. All those things would allow him to stay in Atlantis while still receiving more substantial punishment for his very reckless actions.

Secondly- While Amy MAY have been able to figure out that Sam had 'something to do with her healing' I don't think that would necessarily warrant her receiving an NDA for the program. Despite the fact that she had knowledge that she was indeed on a top secret military base surely there would have been ways they could have transported her out of there without her knowing where she was (or they could have *gasps* LIED to her) maybe a back hall or a service elevator or something that didn't reveal their exact location?

While her program may prove useful in the long run I'm sure there is some kind of minimum training that is required to go to Atlantis (because it is a very emotionally, physically and mentally taxing environment and they would want to make sure that the people they send out there are more than capable of handling such stresses) and there is no way in the time alloted that Amy could have completed even half of that training (especially given her weakened physical state).

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The thing that shocked me the most was that this faux pas was coming from YOU of all people. Someone who I know for a fact does their research and checks things out to make them plausible to the most believable point considering cannon and facts gathered to reach a very believable story.

Also you may want to investigate finding a real beta. I can't help but notice you have been making more and more small mistakes. I know that you have been doing your own beta work (and you've been doing an overall good job) but more things seem to be falling through the cracks. Things that you wouldn't pick up on because you see what you think you wrote not what actually came out of your fingers (ie- of instead of off and such like that). Or if you don't want to try finding a beta maybe try reading your stuff backwards (starting at the end and working your way to the start to find mistakes).

Wow, am I slow to catch up or what? Haven't been ignoring you-weeell, actually, I've been so caught up in a totally different genre that my inbox is crammed with my other faves (like yours) and I'm taking time right now to correct that delay.

Go Lorne! Fight for your right to...take care of Amy. Nice touch having Sam figure out how to keep them together. You big mushie!

Now, take a break until some plot bunnie eats all yer carrots.

I love your Lorne stories. You've added depth to one of my favorite characters. I think it's great that you have Lorne in a committed relationship and actually getting married AND be happy about it. What a unique concept!

I thought that was a clever way of getting Amy the help she needed in order to be healed. Your muse was working just fine!

Oh, I LOVED this different kind of Lorne! Such a wonderful piece of work from beginning to end! I've often thought about writing a widowed Lorne, and I just might. But I like your version of a married Lorne. ;-)

Wonderful job!