This is really nice writing. Painful and heartwrenching, you've captured the emotions perfectly. Wonderfully sweet and tender at the end.

I like the concept and the characterization. My only criticism is that at the beginning, you repeatedly use the word uncomprehend-able, which is not actually a word. The word you were looking for is incomprehensible. Otherwise, well done!

Really enjoyed it! Please continue!

Very good read, thanks for posting it! An excellent little fic.

I had to laugh at the end. That is so NCIS of you, to kill the mood like that. I think they're best kill-the-mood moment has to be the beginning of Kill Ari, part 2. That's hilarious.

*breathes*

wow that really ached my chest, exactly what i was after.

That was wonderful! You really do need to add more to it though, it just has an "unfinished" feeling. Just one or two more chapters to wrap it up :)

It was so sad, yet funny at the end in an ironic Gibbs head lapping kind of way!

good story ;) glad it ended with a little gibbs slap to make us smile just a little...

Okay...normally there are the people that say "Ohh sequel, extra chapter, continue," and I am the one that goes "No, some things are better left off as a one-shot."

This is an exception.

The story isn't finished! There's more...I know it! At least make it a two-shot or a three-shot or something! It needs to have a conclusion, an ending...something! It's not over!

Brilliant writing though :)

Liv,

Ziva reminds me of someone. Three guesses who. In other news, it was really good! Also sad, but at least gibbs knocked some sense into her in the end!

~ dftbamy