and i loved the quote from the little princess. i used 2 have the book...

Wow. This was really good! much better than i expected. and the way Narnian things were woven in2 Susan's stories based on Narnia was awesome. Plus it was funny when that guy came 2 serenade 'Phyllis' and was promptly told that there was no Phyllis there. I wonder what would happen if Susan told their stories but switched out all the names, and if any1 would suspect... after all, Edmund did change drastically after 'the country'... anyway, nice work! :) :D

This is such a good story. A little bittersweet, but not nearly so melancholy as most Susan fics. Thank you for sharing.

Your writing makes me cry. Why do you make Narnia so sad and far-away?

Lovely story!

Really well done. I like how you juxtaposed Lucy and Susan with how they tell thier stories. And your style reads like a fairytale, which is just awesome.

Nice job.

This is just wonderful on so many levels. Your characterizations of Susan and Lucy are fantastic.

that is absolutely lovely :)

oh i love the story telling! very good!

Beautiful!

I don't know why I haven't reviewed this the first time I found it, so here I am trying to rectify that mistake.

The stories that Susan weaves are powerful indeed-and it is not because they are real that they are powerful, but because she knew precisely where the heart is, and could change everything else to disguise it but its Essence. It also gave another perspective to Susan's denial of Narnia. Only one who feels so much could tell stories that deep and with that much emotional involvement. It would seem that she decided not to think about Narnia anymore because it hurts too much that she couldn't bear it. I'm not sure why, but that was the impression I get. Thus, even it is painful to read what could be seen as her betrayal, this fic made me step that much closer to her pain. Lovely.

This story does Susan some justice, it was a shame that she lost her way. It was nice that you started to show Susan's loss of faith in Aslan through her story telling. My favorite part is definitely the geeky boy singing to her and her conversation with Susan. Thank you for keeping them in character :)

I loved it!

This was absolutely gorgeous! I loved your characterization of Susan and Lucy, as well as how effortlessly you wove together the Pevensies' real history in Narnia with the embellishments that Susan created for the sake of her stories. I also love that your Lucy actually speaks about Narnia; I feel that too often authors treat Narnia as this huge secret that can never be told. I think the idea of the girls using storytelling as a way to let out the feelings that must be so painfully pent up inside them is much more realistic, beautiful, and sad.

Well done all around!

- Avia

This was adorable and so... sweet! I just love it!

I don't really now how to type what I fell because of this story, it was just that good!

Buffy~