This was funny and not what I expected lol, great job :)

haha, i like how they have fully functional conversations all while doing that XD

...and Cloud coming at the mention of sephiroth

:O What? Epic sex fail? How can this BE? XD I loved this story! Great job!

How can you make something so cute and hot at the same time? HOW? Teach me! Haha, I love these two, and I love this fic. A definite fave ;)

lol that was funny and awesome i loved it

Adorable xD

I love how Sephiroth was woven into this... I laughed out loud at Cloud's reaction, hah.

ROFL! This is both decidedly hilarious and deliciously hot at once! Zack failing at buttsex XD Oh dear bob you're so full of win *hearts*

~Tekko

omg! they suck at sex! i never thought they would! that is so frikking hilarious! wow. well, bye!

yum yum yum yum yum... thats all i really has to say about that... i do like the grinding better than... th back door...lol it was good though!

Haha! Cloud IS every Soldier's wet dream! XD

This fic was so cute and endearing... Ahaha! I luff Cloud and Zack.

Aw, it's cute in a porn-ish sort of way. :)

Lol, loved it, simply loved it! Are you going to write the scene where Zack asks the General for advice on technique? I hope so, if only to see the look on Sephioth's face, lol

I am so glad you wrote this. As a gay man, I recently had my first sexual encounter, and it is NOT as easy as people see to think it is. Thankfully, my partner was experienced, so he guided me through it.

Another truly great fanfic from you that shows just how much talent you really have. Please, keep writing...

Me read again and again and again and again... ME LOVE STORY! (goes, once again, to check out your other PWP one shot stories)

Cute and funny. Congratulations, you win my heart!