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'and smears chocolate over his cheeks like a tribal tattoo'

The first thing I thought was, 'Are ya tryna' be like your father, Luffy?', but then I realized what kind of 'tattoo' he really did. Lol.
This story was nice. Excellent work!

This is so well written. THe way you described all the crew mates doing their daily task was great. Thanks for putting in so much effort into the beautiful fanfiction.

~Jessica D.

This is really good! You have a great understanding of the Straw Hats.

Wow,you very descriptive, I love your story, this is amazing. I wonder why Zoros eyes are clouded... who could he be thinking of...? CD

(From my sister) - this was soooooo ADORABLE! I LOVED it! XD :D
(From me) - Wow... this. Was. AMAZING! Absolutely loved reading this! Excellent job! :)

i dont get it.

beautiful

it was interesting, and beautiful! :)

Fantastic fanfiction this is. Very descriptive and detailed. Each of the characters have their own stories, but the this was quite intersting to read.

Thank you for the interesting story, I really enjoyed reading this.

Ruto Kuntai

Absolutely amazing! I loved the descriptions and imagery of Luffy drowning, whether in the ocean or in his crew mates. I especially liked the beginning, where you wrote about the interactions Luffy has with each of his friends. You did a wonderful job on that and each one made me squeal at the lovableness of it all.

This is a great oneshot. I loved the descriptions of Luffy hanging out with the crew, I think it captured him and them and why they were friends perfectly. The only qualm I have is the line where you said Zoro's eyes were clouded w/ something he didn't understand. I think Luffy understands his crew better than anyone realizes, but thats just my opinion. Good job.

I love how you wrote this, you've really played up Luffy's childish emotions, which I find a lot people don't do very well. They seem to foget that Luffy's really kind of clueless and child-like at times, but you captured his innocent personality well. And it's really sweet.

Was this meant to be a ZoLu fic? Because the way I read it, there was definately ZoLu at the end. It was a perfect innuendo, not the type of "drowning" you'd expect. And I love how Luffy can't completely understand it.

This was a lovely bit of ZoLu yaoi, and I thought it was bittersweet and very poingnant. I'm sorry that more people haven't reviewed the story, (I know how it feels!) because this is an excellent story.

*deep breath* ... AW !

That was so f* cute ! I loved this loved it loved it loved it. I cant think of any constructive critisium because theres nothing to critisie.

Seriously all your stuff is so good like wow O.o Keep it up.