Point of order. Polly Plummer in 1901 (Bastables were looking tor buried treasure in the Tottenham Road) was ten at the most ("if she had been a very little younger, she would have liked to put one of [the humming rings] in her mouth."). Forty-eight year later, in 1949, she is here a woman in her early seventies. In 1955, when LB came out, the life expectancy was much lower than it is today: fifty-eight would have seemed plenty "old" enough for the target audience.

i love it!

Very interesting story. I like very much that there is no romance, romance never seems to fit well in the stories set in England to me.

Your characterizations seem to be very much in character, except for Lucy. You did a nice Eustace and Edmund with some great little details that brought them to life. I liked your Peter and how you expanded on his feelings about never going to Narnia again. The Professor and Polly were wonderful expansions of their roles and seemed fairly realistic.

Your Lucy I am torn about, though. I like that she isn't pictured as just a happy little girl, but you made her rather silly and fairly stupid. I have no trouble believing that she would have doubts, have issues as to her place in England, but basically you made her an incompetent, selfish child. This is not the woman or the child that Lewis described, in fact she was acting as if she was years younger than Jill when in fact she is supposed to be a bit older. You even had one of the characters comment on how she seemed to be her physical age and not older. I do think Lucy would have issues with finding her place in England, but this is a bit extreme for me.

All in all a very interesting story and a good read.

Susan S

Succeeded? Oh, you did an excellent job! So excellent, in fact, that I began reading this fic this morning, and finished it in the afternoon! All sixteen chapters of it! Awesome story! Just as fun as ones set in Narnia itself; and oh, the character interactions! You did wonderful with all of them!I'm not surprised now that this fic won an award! Please, keep writing and... again, love this fic! :)

This was great, though slightly confusing. Poor Lucy, I wish she didn't feel so guilty about the whole deal. If I were her, you can bet I'd try to go back to Narnia. I'm going to read some of your other stories; I hope they're as good as this one!

Brilliant fic you've got here! The characters were all in check that I'd almost believe Lewis himself had written this. I bet he would have approved of this fic!

good! well done and originalo!

I loved this! I thought it was absolutely fantastic. They had a wonderful adventure that involved Narnia while in England-though it was a bit sad that Peter wasn't there very often.

Anyway, great job!

All right, I've only just stumbled upon this story, and was up two hours later than I intended reading the entire thing. It was WONDERFUL. I really wanted to leave a review after each chapter, but I was so enthralled that I couldn't stop reading. So now I'll do my best to do a general go-over, though I'll likely miss some things.

First off, kudos for pulling off such a perfect Narnian story on Earth. Most Earth stories are sad and nostalgic as the characters long for Narnia, and while this one had a touch of that, it also had a fun adventure of its own- an adventure that totally reminded me of C.S. Lewis' books. I also really liked that you had the Seven Friends of Narnia interacting. It's one of those things that you're only given a glimpse of in the books, and not only did you have them all very in-character, but their interactions were perfect. I liked the comfort level you could sense between the seven of them.

Now, on to specifics.

In the beginning, I was in so much suspense, racking my brain about who the stranger could possibly be. I was most definitely not expecting a Telmarine. I was thinking Calormene. Though then when you DO know, and you think about it, all the clues are there. Obviously Peter and Edmund would have recognized something from their reign straightaway, and all the comments about the "dratted Lion" and "nasty creatures" are rather telling. I liked that he knew Lucy and Alsan and was afraid of Edmund. Very nice touches. Also, Edmund's fight with the stranger was so well done. You got the impression that Edmund was still a boy, but all of that training in Narnia wasn't for nothing.

Oh! And a random thought, while they were all SO in character, one of my particular favorite parts was when Eustace found Jill and Edmund in the pantry, and Edmund is just annoyed and then closes the door again. No embarassment, not uneccesary explanations. He just shuts the door. So perfect.

I also really REALLY liked what you did to Lucy in this story. She's so often portrayed as the one without problems, that it was nice to see a change. I think she would have been rather blind to the fact that she in England she was only a little girl, and while she DID have the experience, she still needed protecting. And I felt so bad for her having to come to terms with all of that. That she could be a Queen IN England. I think that when she can't bandage Edmund because she's shaking too badly is a perfect example of this fact. And I really liked that you had it be Lucy who was tempted. It kind of expands on her trip to find Aslan in PC and looking into the Magician's Book in VDT. You did a great job making her human.

Oh, and I liked the subtle mentions of Susan. They weren't overbearing, but enough to let the reader know of the situation.

And Eustace's comment on the Telmarines not being so bad. Well, that made me laugh right along with Peter and Edmund. Yeah, right, Eustace. Still slightly know-it-all-ish, even after being undragoned.

So, I know I'm missing loads of things, but this is the longest review I've ever written in my life. I really did like the elements of mystery and suspense, and it was a brilliantly creative and well-developed plot. This was truly amazing, and thanks for writing.

That was an exciting adventure! Really well-written and I love the Seven Friends of Narnia. You got their personalities too. Keep up the good work!

I'm so sorry I haven't reviewed for ages! This is fantastic-Lucy and Jill are down absolutely pat in this. It's marvellous.

This fic continued to be just as intriguing as it was in the beginning. Very well written, very unique and original, and altogether enjoyable! Congratulations on wonderful story!

~ Avia

Wow, I have been reading this nonstop, and I just happened to see that it was you, Split, that wrote it! What a great job! Keep it coming, I can't get enough!

This story is absolutely fascinating thus far. I can't wait to finish! Very well done!

~ Avia

Awesome! And so sweet to give Lucy that dream...

And now there is this whole new world to play around in )

I look forward to reading more of your writing!

h max marius (cherokee)