Want some advice on how to make this hot and entertaining? Rewrite your story to have Alexis assigned to seduce Aster instead. He knows how to appreciate a girl in this story would have gotten right down to business with Alexis during that strip duel. And he isn't shown to be clueless about girls canonically like Jaden, who did not even understand why he had to turn around while Alexis hid her spirit key under her shirt in the anime.

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Ahh damn it. Had high hopes for this. You spread the focus too much, instead of focusing on Alexis seducing Jaden and the gangs struggle to making her sane again you had a tonne of pointless dialouge. Seeing what Bastion was doing was pointless, the duel with Ra right now while cool, is also pointless. We don't need a scene of Atticus watching every move Alexis makes, just knowing he is watching over her is enough. I was expecting a lot more fluff/teasing. Was near enough none in 12 chapters.

finish the rest of this chapter please!

I know this story is old but i hink if someone writes a similar story but White Alexis does actually start getting feelings for jaden or White Alexis is more forward with her feelings for him hope this story is finished or you come back to it or some one else makes a story similar to this

great read, really can't wait for the rest of it

OMG how can you not continue this?! I love what you have done with Jaden and alexis, and your OC's are great! You have such promise with this story, its a true shame to see it unfinished. I think you might have gotten sick of writing the duel, that kind of detail work will wear on you if you cant get past it. Well this is technically my second time reading this story, i read it back when all you had was up to the strip duel and loved it, and i just got done re-reading it and continuing it again, and still love it.

I agree with Dragoon06 about the wear and rushing. That review was actually pretty spot on all together. This story is one of those that stands out against the rest because its a fantastic combination of plot development and character development and humor. I love how you give much more depth to Alexi's character and also balance Jadens knowledge and unawareness out perfectly! You are so talented and honestly i wish i could write things the way you do. I hope you get your drive back someday to continue this great work. If you need ideas on how to continue or help with the story i have plenty of great ideas for you. Just pm me. Until next time keep on writing my friend!

A way that alexis can suduce Jayden is by "accidentally" falling on him and we breaats end up in his face

Pls continue on this it is petty good and this is passing my time

Hope the gift's worth it.

This story is really good, please update :)

I would love to read more of it

good so far. i want more!

How come you have not updated in over 4 years

Good chapter,as for the pokegirl idea I think those ideas would be nice except they shouldn't look like or be named after characters from the yugioh universe that done to often with the naruto/ranma fics we need originality I love when I see storys with it