Personally, I don't think Aslan would just outright say that she cannot be redeemed, however it worked for this and I liked it! Especially the ending! It's been so long since I've read The Last Battle and reading this made me so nostalgic

WHY MUST YOU MAKE THEM SO SADDDDDDDDDDD!
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Beautifully written, and a good dose of brotherly love on Peter's part. :)

Well done.

welcome home...

I was sadden that Susan didn't make it with them at the end of canon.

thank you for changing that

That was beautiful. It gave me peace on the matter of Susan's fate. Very lovely indeed.

wow!

Lovely piece :) I really hope this eventually happens!

Aww:( This was so bittersweet. Please write another one:)

Wow. Great job. You went and made me cry.
JP

*GASP* Aslan had Susan killed! No offense or anything, but that's basically what's implied because when everyone else died they went to Real Narnia.

Nice ending to Susan story like how you showed that Susan while she couldn't think about narnia was still the gentle queen when helping other in England.

So interesting. Thank you for giving Susan a character that works, for explaining her behavior with a motivation that may still be true.

I find it hard to believe that Aslan would change his mind like that...

... but I loved reading about Susan coming home.

Sapphireswimming

I would like to point out that The Last Battle never says Susan will not make it to the New Narnia. In fact the repeated line Once a King or Queen of Narnia, always a King or Queen of Narnia, implies that one day Susan will make it there, only that her journey will be far more difficult than the one her family faced. It is also necessary to note that it was Susan who deliberately rejected Narnia. Aslan was not keeping her out, Susan was not trying to get in.

That was beautiful. I was close to tears in the middle, you expressed Susan's change perfectly through the eyes of a brother. I hate how she changed, as she was always my favorite character.

Love. it.