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   Mrs.WolverineFanGirl chapter 4 . 7/5/2013 mooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooor |
| technoWriter15 chapter 1 . 9/14/2012 :D |
| RinCoKenn chapter 4 . 8/7/2011 abe got a crush. lol. you have good writing skills. |
| Seagoatink chapter 4 . 10/13/2008 heh u did a good half of the flirting for them... you forgot to include body language though. i love your storie! i cant wait for the next chapters and its really good soo far. |
| Iamthelostone13194 chapter 4 . 9/18/2008 YO THIS STORY IS AWSOME PLEASE WRITE MOREZ! |
| Kairi's-twin chapter 4 . 8/26/2008 I really love this so far. I can't wait to see what happens between Abe and Avery. This is really well written and I love Avery she is such a great character and she is able to stand up to H.B. I really enjoyed the convo between Avery and Abe. That guy is a jerk I really don't like Manning. I haven't see the movie for a while... Who is Manning again? PLEASE PELASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON! ~ALANNA~ |
| Sekar chapter 4 . 7/28/2008 hey, i'm really digging this story, i hope you pick it up again and continue |
| transientday chapter 4 . 7/22/2008 Huzzah! A decent Abe/OC story! I noticed several type-os, but that's okay. Please keep up this story? |
| Your Inner Demons chapter 4 . 7/11/2008 You actually did a great job with the flirting! Please tell me if you're still updating. |
| Kay Smith chapter 4 . 7/10/2008 This story absolutely needs to be continued! It's so good so far! There just aren't enough stories like this for poor, lovable Abe. :'( |
| NOLAdoodles chapter 4 . 5/13/2008 Hm...well, I was really excited to see that someone was doing an Abe movieverse fic...but (just constructive criticism), it could be much better. It seems like your really rushing it, with lots of grammatical and punctuation errors. Also, I'm not digging the lack of continuity in your dialogue set-up. I've always figured that when one person talks, it starts a paragraph, then the next person gets their own paragraph, so that there's no confusion for the reader. Anywho...I AM into the way the story is going, you just need to clean it up. Keep on writing! |
| JarethsTightPants chapter 4 . 12/6/2007 Any chance that you will be continuing the story? I love what I've read so far, I really hope that you decide to continue. |
| Magikat409 chapter 4 . 11/6/2007 OMG, I love this story! I hope u'll update it soon! |
| Helena Valentine chapter 4 . 7/6/2007 Keep writing, this is good. The only problem I could find was you kept saying things like "And then he left to do stuff." It sounds blunt, and most stories sound better overall when they are a little more discriptive... really good though, keep writing! And the part with Abe was cute. |
| Helena Valentine chapter 1 . 7/6/2007 wow. dark yet good so far. |
