Don't tell me you stopped here? Why didn't you finnish it ?

I love u ... P.s. y is ch5 not Long ... Plz quip Wrighti.g

So, that woman is hikaru's real mother? But why she don't stop them when their fight? I hope it will end with happy ending. So when will you update?

Oh, i see then. Poor hikaru, i must full in sorrow know. By the way what happen with his legal wife? Is she cant give a child to her husband so he force hikaru to go with him? If she can't pregnant why he just divorced his wife and married hikaru's mother? Well... It though story, you made it to make me cried. Good job.

Hold on, could it be hikaru parent had been divorced? If yes. Why not knowing his own father? Or hikaru doesnt really her mother son? Poor hikaru... He must be confusing. There is another couple who claim him as their child. Did they find hikaru? Well, i just have to see what happen then.

Shindo had been late for 4 hour. I think its a litte surprise's for me. I know shindo came late sometimes. But not that long. That a good trick. So hikaru eat with free since he dont brouht enough money. How hikaru to pay yuna-san back? Dating her? Well. I hope you will not going sick since you said that you had been slept for 32 hour. Because i want to know the end of story.

So this chapter is from hikaru's side about akira and so akira either. I see they have a fun and happy side about their rival and same think about girl. So cool for begining. But i have a felling it would become interesting story( and i hope i was right) ok. That for know then. Bye...

Aw... Touya-kun and Shindo-san can be so cute together... ~ I really like it! o Please continue soon! ~

aihh... is it over?

i'm still waiting for the end of this story...

hiks...

plissz... continue write this...

Really good so far...Keep on going!

WOW, this story is great.

i dont care if the grammer is bad, its the plot that counts.

this is a amazing plot, very original!

this is a really good story as well.

I LOVE it.!

that hug in the end was SO KAWAII!

but... you said there was only one chapter left, but theres no chapter 6. :/

i Really, REALLY want tot see haw this story finnishes.

if you written it down, please find it and update your story.

i really love this story and im sad that you didnt finish it.

why didnt you finish such a good story?

well anyway, i LOVE this story and i hope you will finally put up the last chapter.

PLEASE~

Onegai shimasu~

Motto Kudasai~

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~kari

... merlin... interesting plot... though i really wonder where the hell didi you get this idea from..

It's really a good fic )

I don't often submit review (i'm french and it's hard for me to writte in english ; a good review I mean )

but, since i like this fic very much, I want to tell you it's very sad to let a fic uncompleted!

It would be great if you write the last chapter ) please

Update soon I want to know what's gonna happen don't make me wit I'm not patient enough for that _

As interesting the format of this chapter was, it's extremely hard on the eyes, the sentences run on, and for the most part, it's giving me a headache. Go back to your former chapters and review some of the grammar. The grammar isn't bad, but there are a couple words that are missing.

I feel that these individual POV's are moving a bit too fast. The words, because they're so crammed, gives the impression that these characters aren't really thinking coherently, which then makes your attempt at telling a story less coherent and hard to understand, and may cause readers to lose interest.

Other than this however, I rather like the irony and the difference in the POV's. Please continue and keep up the good work.