Really enjoying this so far. I hope living with the hyuuga won't drastically change his personality though. I read one where the author gave him a personality much like Neji or Sasuke and it kinda ruined the story. Looking forward to the next chapter!

so good

if you so eager about make different from dozen other.
why not make naruto happy-go-lucky till the end.
there is really boring nowaday about dark-dark bullshit story.

PLEASE UPDATE cuz there are some good ideas here and I kinda want to see Sharingan vs. Rinnegan with Sasuke and Naruto, but not only that I would like to see if Naruto learns mother and fathers techniques like chakra chains, hirashin, rasengan, fuuinjutsu, and kenjutsu along with learning the sage arts from Jiraiya.

Will Naruto be able to use the Sharingan like Madara or like Nagato he will not be able to the full powers of Madara's eyes?
Also I hope there will be no cliches like Naruto using "Mask" to hide his power in the academy
Living and training with the Hyuga clan will affect his personality and make him stronger.

Interesting, I hope Naruto will use the Rinnegan the without the need for the "Six Paths of Pain" like Nagato before his death, Edo Tenesi Nagato was stronger because he can use all the Rinnegan's abilities with his original body.

Sounds good so far

Hmm... While the end of this chapter was a bit abrupt, the story does seem interesting.

As for what you said in first chapter... Fine. But I think you should use translations done in Narutopedia instead of official translations(e.g. "Shadow Clone Technique" instead of "Shadow Clone Jutsu" or "Blaze Release: Kagutsuchi" instead of "Inferno Style: Flame Control"), as those are more accurate than official ones. Also, names of some techniques would be better as Japanese(e.g. Rasengan, Chidori, Shinra Tensei, Banshō Tenin).

Looking forward to next chapter.

interesting chapter.
hope with the new informations konan given, you plan sarutobi use the evidences to get rid of danzo

Continue this interesting story soon

As you mentioned a lack of familiarity with Japanese honorifics and other terms, you would probably be better off not trying to use them aside from the ones that were kept in the English dub, even though it will be jarring to some readers. Which would mean changing "Sandaime-sama" back to "Lord Third."

From an objective standpoint, the only real mistake you made with this chapter was in succumbing to one of the most common fanon misconceptions by making Naruto a victim of physical abuse from the villagers. Nothing in the source material suggests that the villagers of Konoha ever went that far against Naruto, and it makes no logical sense that Naruto would have been left unprotected if there was any legitimate danger to his life from within the village walls. Physical abuse against Naruto is overdone in fan fiction, and it is enough to drag down what is otherwise an interesting story premise. If you are looking to improve the story, that is the first thing I would suggest fixing.

(Although I also doubt Hiruzen would have sent Naruto to the orphanage as that place is one of the primary sources of recruits/conscripts for Danzō's Root program...)

I'm hooked!

Konan being a convert to the leaf I wonder? Or will she return to better ame. Good chapter and start

cool

Very well done