Hmm, that Bastila/Revan moment at the end was a bit awkward for both... You certainly are adding interesting twists to the frame given by the game. Ever since Bastila appeared in this story, she seems to have had a special connection to Phoenix on top of the Force bond...or maybe the Force bond plays a role here as well, enhancing what she feels. Curious to see how it all plays out.

Great chapter! Saul/Revan is something I've never seen before, and I am interested in seeing how it affects the dynamics between Saul, Carth and Phoenix. Calo Nord being able to figure out Phoenix's true identity was also a nice added touch, as well as the background story with the real Phoenix. I kind of hope that also the OC's survive, they seem interesting.

T3 seems to have much more character in this fic than in the game...which is good. In the game, he was quite a boring addition to the crew, imho.

I'm also enjoying Bastila's characterization so far. She seems to be giving nice insight into Phoenix, being able to read her emotions, and also provides some additional moral compass. Looking forward to Canderous joining the crew as well.

Having Phoenix train her combat skills toward blaster to throw Bendak's expectations off was a nice touch. I'd as well expect an experienced pit fighter to study their enemies and finetune the strategy based on their fighting style. I've also liked how much Bastila internally struggles to see Phoenix as Phoenix and not Revan. Looking forward to seeing how the plotline progresses.

I'm trying to catch up with some reading and noticed I have reviewed this story up until here. Liked the plot point about Revan machinating the swoop gang war behind the scenes to get them out of the way for the Sith.

Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.

An interesting story so far. I like some of the new details that you are adding and how Revan sold an entirely new persona for herself to the galaxy.

However, there should probably be more deviation from the KOTOR game. You're doing a KOTOR re-write so to some extent it is unavoidable, but ever since Phoenix woke up on the Endar Spire this story has been following the script almost verbatim. Yes, there are some new details that you're adding, but it seems like every conversation that took place in game is also taking place within this story. The confused dialog between Phoenix and Trask served to introduce the player to the game they were playing. It wasn't necessarily to have the exact same script play out in this story. Neither are the other instances like with the janitor or this copy/paste dialog with Carth about his past.

Ah, Dustil caught sneaking onto the Hawk! That was great. Good banter between T3 and HK, too. Look forward to seeing what happens next with our Sithkid. And Bandon's still around somewhere, isn't he?
Also, yay for new shiny laptops!

hope you are over being sick and injured. we had a month like that too.

Ooo more Dustil and Mission. will he meet carth or won't he? suspense is great!

I like the sith warrior story too, although my fave is the agent and then the inquisitor.

I just typed put this review and it vanished, argh.

okay, again... Roland wann's"s pov. it made him sympathetic even when he's being an ass to others later. and not that much of an ass, he does offer the Ithorian altnerative.

was very creepy and effective when Revan there a bit with Chodo.

love love love Dustil meet cite with Mission.

hah, I've reviewed before and said the same thing. I'm sorry my focus is so scattered. I was having the strongest sense of deja Vu, here!

I like Master Jax, and I like him voicing doubts About what the Jedi did. and I think splitting the chapter is a great idea. sometimes a chapter needs a lot of little beats-othet times, each scene should have their due. you set things up here...

Nice description of her Force-vision! it felt very real. I also love Juhani helping Mission. Very in character for them both, I think!

I have a lot of catching up! I think I read this chapter before, but starting here again...

I like Toka, and nice foreshadowing with him. and veranda is interesting. I like fosh too.

Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.

Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.