Aww. Both chapters were so nice. Thank u Asami for remembering and thank u Ryusuke for coming back. Great work.

i too like ryuisuke X ,asami saying such words to feilong ,is so not is a "man of few words"and will not say such shaggy ,i enjoyed this for your hardwork.

Your first chapter was good, however the second chapter was just confusing and out of place. You threw Feilong in there without a proper explanation and setting. Asami is having a conversation with him but there's no indication to how they got to that point. Are they suddenly allies or friends? You could have just done a two shot for Asami x Aki and written a separate one for Feilong x Oc. That way the two couples would have made better sense. I notice you tend to write a fic but there's either less or no explanation behind the character's thoughts and actions. Like your OC's for instance. You don't really explain them, but add them to your stories quite a lot. You need to reread over your writing and pick out your own mistakes, that's how you will learn and improve as a writer. And also don't always rant about the negative reviews you get, as an author you should learn from the advice you are given. I understand though, that some reviews are just irritating and have no value. Those I would ignore, the more you rant the more those reviewers feed off your annoyance and irritation.
I wish you all the best. Good luck

You spelt February wrong.

I LOVED IT ! :D THANKS SO MUCH :D I LIKE RYUISUKE TOO ! :D

I like it.

we don't know how Feilong would act in a situation at this. i think Yami did a good job at portraying him, just think of the sitution he was thrown in. hes emotionally unstable and well, being someone who has kind of been in his shoes i understand where your coming from.

While Feilong is not one of my faves, (at all), I did enjoy this chapter. To the people who say that you don't get his character well (ravan and Chaozoma), I don't think they understand how a emotionally broken person will act when they're at they're lowest point, when the y feel that everyone has just abandoned them.
I think you did well with this character becase we got to see a side of Feilong that isn't portrayed in the manga, a side that's...well...a side that we're not used to. He was more femine, as chaozoma pointed out and I think that did well because he's supposed to be femnine. In your story you explain how he feels lost, how he lost everything (emotionally at least). And Feilong is also smart, if would've ruined the story if he beat up the man. He is a mafia boss in Japan, if he acutally started a fight with someone in Shinjuku not only would that be legal trouble, but he'd get arrested and start a drug war because you know the shit he's got with Asami...being in Japan..Takaba...Asami... So I think that was very realistic that he just poured water on him, all in all it would've been dumb for him to actually sock him in the face. He's smart, he knows better than that.

And raven, I really don't hink you should mind raven because firstly your writng doesn't suck, it may have flaws and errors but doesn't everyone on this site? Secondly, I have issues with a reviewer who reviewers a story just because they dislike the person and that reviwer doesn't even have the gall to log in... Wow...

However, I do have a few problems with this story! Main one being, I don't trust Ryuisuke...at all. He just up and left? Wow, divorce, divorce, divorce! WHY! And he just appeared out of o where, I respt that you've made him someone but he is just so suspiciou, a little less of him unless he has a good reason for his absense! Was the coma faked to? Was it staged? I just don’t trust him, at all.

I think you captured Feilong perfectly. It was Valentine’s Day and he was ridiculed, through most of this story he was thinking rather than talking. His thought process was excellent and his reactions. I think now, you’ve portrayed him as not someone who is strong, cold and spiteful, but as someone who is sad inside, that just wants help, someone that doesn’t always want to keep up that façade where he is hiding all the time. I understand that everyone has their own views on Feilong, but this is a good portrayel because we don’t know how he would act in a situation where he was basically called shallow. Again the man in the bar was great because he showed genuine regret! People tend to forget that deep down in side, he’s a kind person and now, that he’s kind of stretching out o fhis walls he’s feeling sorry for what he does.
The part where he saw Takaba and Asami eating…whew…if that was me I probably would’ve busted the window open, but that’s me. Again, if people bitch about that part and him not doing anything, please keep in mind Asami would kill him. If he phyiscall inflicted pain on the man in the bar, that woulds start a war! Think about these things before you review people.
Hope you had a good Valentine’s Day! Mine was alright, I live in a small down we kind of went from place to place!
So, good story, untrusworth husband. Sadly, Feilong isn’t my favorite character, but he’s captivating. But, I don’t like realy reading stories based on him, I just feel bad for him. I like AkixAsami better.

Good luck Yamiga!
PS: No Mikhail?

This is terrible and one of the WORST characterizations Ive seen of Fei long. You dont know him well at all. Its as if you dont read back your own writing to see how much it really sucks.

chapter 2 is kinda disappointing. i was expecting more because chapter 1 is really a good chapter. your feilong is so effeminate totally unlike the feilong in the series who may look like a woman but exudes manliness. to point, in the bar, the man could have suffered more physically rather than just receiving a splash of drinks if this was done as feilong in the series. i hope to find the Finder feel on your next chapters.

Poor Feilong! *crying* I love Asami, but he's an ass. *angry* :D
I like this story a lot! Can you write some story about Feilong and Ryuisuke, please! I love these two! Something with a lot ANGST would be great! haha

that was cute but why was feilong husband in a coma and you spell feilong name wrong i one of your paragraph

Cute story. I liked it.

This was cute haha, but White Day and Valentine's Day are exactly 1 month apart...
Still, loved it! They are sooo perfect for each other!

awwwww very cute