Lovely, very well witten. I had a craving for a darkish Sarah and this was what I needed. Thank you. :)

This is darling, and fascinating, and sharp. Well done.
I do have one question, though: What were you trying to say with the gravedirt at the beginning? Was it to imply that she had died, and thereafter became Fae? Or did she simply bring Jareth to a graveyard for some unknown reason? How could he not know what he was touching?

I can never get over how perfect this ending is

Omg this was amazing.

This was so well-written! It flowed well and captures the changing dynamic between Jareth and Sarah. Powerful stuff.

interesting.

That ending... What a great twist of the knife. This was very well written.

Whoa...this is amazing!

Sarah sees clearly and far. Poor Jareth. Well, I take that back. He did exactly what he said he would do.

Howdy!

Oh, that last line. Pure perfection. Simple and true to the story. Thank you.

Best thoughts.

I loved this so much. I forgot to breathe at one point while reading this. It's so beautiful, the way you tied everything together at the end.

This is absolutely stunning. There isn't a single word out of place, or line or sentiment. Everything flows to the rhythm perfectly. It's awesome, wonderful and amazing. Spell-binding, even.

Wow! That was awesome! You don't often see Sarah characterized that way, or dark to that extent anyway. It was very refreshing! I loved it!

this is a gem. An absolute gem, There is NOTHING I could critique. A lovely spin and you have a beautiful way in words.

Beautifully written. I like Dark Sarah very different from the usual Sarah, the innocent and spoiled brat. Underground is changing her here and she became vicious and threat to Jareth. It's a power struggle. Very nice it has a potential for whole story. I applaud you.