bro you need to mention if naruto isnt the main charactor people will lose intrest if your not homest because they came here expecting an awesome naruto story but instead got a lame oc story

This stuff is all over the place and Naruto doesn't seem to think anything through and I'm not sure if you're trying to portray him as a moron or having many screws loose. Artemis is surprisingly cool with having a child out of nowhere even more that it's with a man. Your OC naruto's daughter is the beginning of a Mary Sue character who befriends anyone, isn't fazed by anything and will have a lot of influence despite not changing any canon event. Hades here is OOC as well. He's more likely to just send her back or just kill her and send her soul to Elysium than go all ' I'm Hades, I apologize for bringing you here' and all that.

Espero q continúe

whats naruto even doing man

Artemis seems ridiculously chill with having a kid outta nowhere

Better chapter. All chapters are still confusing. Please reboot the story and please maintain order, so it won't be confusing for readers to read

Ya this is all over place and I dislike this Naruto he's annoying as fuck about chakra and shit not bad but sucks imo I came here for Papa naru and mama Artemis not really seeing it found myself skimming

Another type of BS most authors perpetuate and I refuse to believe is the Unchanging Behaviour Pattern and Mindscape of Naruto. Ok he is a brat he can have a sewer as a mindscape and be hyperactive moron. But what about a hundred or two hundreds of years of living and meditation. If he is immortal in a fiction and has lived for a long time there is no way he stayed as a moron and has the same mindscape beacoue! meditation training living expieriences.

Just Imagine the Mindscape of GEoM:(If you believe in shamanistic ritul suicide as an origin) GEoM should at the start have a mindscape portraying some cavern with a simple fire and some animals skins, maybe some wench as a image of recreation or thoughts about survival and propagation. Couple milleniums pass and there should be some piramids or temples dedicated to his image in his mindscape, probably with massive ammounts of gold and statuetes of him. He should also start thinking in a longer term. Couple of milleniums pass by and his mindscape would probably look like a shrine to the mankind evolution and science. With various labs and so on maybe Davinci works at some corner. Couple of Milleniums pass and his mindscape will probably be gilded golden palace with his statuetes in gigantic proportions, whole fleets and giant starbases outside the athmosphere of the palace(whatever you say about GEoM, that does not change the fact he is a narcistic bastard that knows what best for everyone in his mind) he would probably have a harem of eldari s uts in some hidden part of his mindscape palace.

Why would probably the mindscape of GEoM look like above and be constantly changing to such image? Becouse People change, even immortals and it is BS to think that a immortal Naruto would stay happy go lucky moron with the same mindscape. Most authors seem to forgot this particular thing. Most probably couse we are mortla and we think from a day to day perspective. Thus the whole matter of characters growth simply locked to a moment of time.

I refuse to belive that a beig that have lived for a s it ton of time would be a typical Naruto moron. This abomination of a chapter is not in any way funny. The only reason he would be forigven for behaving like a total moron Naruto would be if immortality have taken his marbels of sanity down the biggest drain that exsist, otherwise it is a BS abomination of a chapter.

I really tried following your story, got quite a bit into it but I can’t keep going. It’s not the changing perspectives it’s the lack of detail in each one. You aren’t giving the reader a solid base of reference to either time, events or current thoughts to frame what is written. It’s quite the headache. If it had more it would be very enjoyable, good luck

imagine her reaction to what he does to kaguya lol

Wait... NO! My favorite character is dead!

This is a bad time... Still gonna read.

Shit fic

Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.

Good job though I feel naruto is kind of underpowered here you would think with the many years he has been alive he would have mastered almost every shinobi art.