Keep updating your work!

Like I was saying: I think Hickup and his dragon could be advocates for change-teaching people that difference is okay, not to be shunned for any reason. I am going to be taking a disability study's minor so might bring up topics every now and then, seeing what you think.

Keep updating!

Great job! Keep it up!

Oceana Furiozo

ah toothless has a little sister

so cute!

good story please counteniue

Super awesome

:D

I find the story an interesting idea, you do need to work on the structure, its broken up far to much. Also don't forget you "" or '' if you like for thinking. looking forward to more.

Awesome fic!

"This will take some getting used to Hiccup as the babe might hurt itself if it can't see like we can."

What if she could sort of see *unlike* they can?

I'm thinking radar. There's a link at news/technology/science/radar-like-inner-vision-helps-blind-learn-to-navigate-beyond-preconceived-limits/article2035203/ which makes sense without the pics, but unfortunately there's a bunch of extra stuff in columns on both sides and the header (and the link to print it goes to a copyright service sign-up instead of a page with the article and no extra frills!).

Sorry, this story is just proving too hard to latch onto and read properly. The narrative is too cursory. I have to say I like the basic story idea, but you really need to embellish, relax your sentences, don't try to cram so much story into every single one. Let it flow gradually, take time to explore some of the details. I'm willing to bet tehre's a whole lot more to this story in your head than we've seen in the chapters posted so far. Add some of that in.

This could very well be a good story, but as I've said, it needs a more involved narrative.

Keep the updates coming and, remember what I said in the first review, and all along ever since I've virtually met you.

I just had to read this story as it caught my ear about the Dragonit being Blind like you and I. I'm glad that Toothless doesn't care that she's unsighted and, hope he lets her do almost everything they do. Blindness isn't a physical handicap after a while, it's just a nucence. Keep updating this little kitty and I'll keep reading when i can

You have a compelling premise for this story, Pricat. Congratulations. You are right in portraying that animals sometimes abandon disabled young in the wild. Even Vikings apparently used to do it, too. But bear in mind that young animals don't survive by themselves in the wild for likely more than a few days. You can find realistic details like this to add to your story through online research.

But consider slowing your story down, setting more of a mood, describing more detail of feelings, as well as what can be felt or seen.

One thing I'd suggest is working with a Beta Reader to help you proofread this story for errors and help in other ways, too. In looking up Beta Readers who have registered to help with HTTYD stories alone, there are 109 of them! Just go to betareaders/movie/How_to_Train_Your_Dragon/ , read some of the profiles, and pick one to write to and see if you can work with them. If you want to learn more about Beta Readers, go to betareaders/ .

Writing is an art, and like all art, it can be learned, which can be fun with people who want to help like these Beta Readers do.

I would encourage you to work with a Beta Reader, and keep writing this story. I feel your story could become really good, especially as you say you are visually impaired to a degree as well. So no one else could write this story quite like you could. Use your own life experiences where they can fit in and help us readers feel for the characters.

You're off to a decent start here. Don't be embarrassed to improve it (I improve my stories when needed), and above all, keep writing!