Reviews for The baby's father |
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IzzyIniguez chapter 4 . 4/15/2010 You need A LOT of work on grammar, characterization, and spelling. But I have to admit... You scored some points in predicting Demetri WAS Janis's baby daddy. |
RadCherishIsEve chapter 4 . 4/12/2010 ...:(...:((... |
RadCherishIsEve chapter 3 . 4/12/2010 That's fin. You're doing a great job with the story so I don't mind it. :) |
RadCherishIsEve chapter 2 . 4/12/2010 I can't believe Janis wouldn't accept it! She should believe it coz she and Demetri belong together! Anyways, yay, Demetri is gonna visit Janis! So exciting! |
RadCherishIsEve chapter 1 . 4/12/2010 Ooh! I've always wanted Demetri to be the father of Janis' baby! I love it so far! Keep it up! Go Janis/Demetri! |
sbisque chapter 4 . 3/22/2010 I'm so sorry to read that you decided to quit the story - I think it had potential :) But I understand. |
sbisque chapter 1 . 3/22/2010 VERY interesting! I find the idea of Demetri & Janis very intriguing. Demetri is my favorite FF character. I am working on a FF/Mentalist story LOL but it's slash. |
CosmicalMadison chapter 4 . 10/21/2009 That's a bummer, but totally fine. You're the writer, and you have to decide what to do yourself. :) If you'd like me to look over any of your other stuff (or even if you don't), let me know. I've been waiting to hear back from you. |
Solivagant chapter 4 . 10/20/2009 Aw( S'okay though. I've abandoned more than my fair share of stories in the past, which is why my main focus is one shots... Well... FlashForward one shot? ~Cookie |
Solivagant chapter 3 . 10/6/2009 The point of fanfiction is to make up your own plot lines and add to the story thats already in place. I think that you should probably just go for it now, but I do see where you're coming from. Can you please just get a beta or something to help with grammer and stuff? |
CosmicalMadison chapter 3 . 10/5/2009 I totally understand about not having a spellchecker. That stinks. Anyway, if you don't have time to edit yourself, you could send me your stuff and I could check it over and fix any mistakes and have it back you on the same day. You dont' have to, though; I'm just trying to be helpful. :) Keep on writing. |
CosmicalMadison chapter 2 . 10/5/2009 I like what you have so far, but I have a first suggestions. First, you could try to make your chapters a little longer. Second, your grammar and formatting needs some work. I'd be happy to beta for you if you'd like, or you can find someone else to do it. |
Zathara001 chapter 1 . 10/5/2009 I really love this concept. There's all kinds of inherent potential conflict here, and I hope you follow through with that. That said, the abysmal grammar turns me off completely, and I won't read further if that's not addressed. |
Solivagant chapter 1 . 10/5/2009 Well, here's number three! Interesting start, but not very well edited. |
Pagan-Angel13 chapter 1 . 10/5/2009 Interesting. Curious to see what happens. |