FANTASTIC

WONDERFUL

ADORABLE

INCREDIBLE

I think it is perfect just the way you wrote it. Very sweet

AWESOME! Wish there was more!

IM SO HAPPY FOR THEM

-cries tears of joy-

so cute!

Aww, it's so nice to see someone portraying Kanda as sensitive and caring rather than just having him drag Allen to bed right away. Those have their moments too but sometimes I just want them to explore their feelings a little.

sina cere

PandaFlower

Boo Hoo i wanted more but i oh well ,i really enjoyed it.

i loved the story! it was so cute & sweet! i'm sad that u ended it so short but it was still rlly good!

SWEET! _

I'M SO SAD NOW! D:

Whhy aww it ended so suddenly *sad face*

It was awesome but short

Short and sweet I guess...

Loved it all in all. You really do write amazing, just had to say. Though there were some spelling errors hurr and thurr you made it up alright.

So sad to see this one go, but I must let it go, though I will not stop looking out for your fics!

~Xenophili

good work, id say, on the continuation of the story (before your break). the kiss was well done (i found it funny how Kanda said he wouldn't take advantage, but he did).

after the kiss; at the break, the story is very 'rushed' and choppy. the pace of the narration expressed that the story should've been 'longer' or that the story demanded more background of the conflict.

id advise writing a separate chapter as an epilogue, because it can explain the fate of Allen and Kanda, as the author had originally wrote and it might help the story flow better. The two ending parts aren't necessary because it's not really part of the original story; it's just a conclusion. The conflict was basically the two's relationship (Kanda being forward and Allen's resistance). Not to mention, there's still more conflict that was introduced in those two 'conclusions'.

the story is enjoyable, but im disappointed in it's ending (it doesn't feel finished much).

hi there, thaks for the new chapter! it was really nice and cute, but...now i am sad because its the last one T.T *sniff*

you wrote this chapter really good, never sliding in too cheesy sentences...all the things you wrote about the two getting used to each other are tue, i never heard of two people who see each other and kiss immidiatly...o.k., there are some, but for those who are shy or not used having someone around all the time it doesn't work like that...haha, i always thought that Allen was a bad drinker(with only one glass of cider xxD), but what about Kanda? what would have happened if he had drink his glass as well without looking what it is? though i have to add it is kinda clear that you'll get alcoholic things in an Inn...and how cuute, how Allen tried to describe tha he wanted to be togheter with Kanda as well...just a pity we won't see them in acton *cough cough*, but you could still write a sequel if you want...aha!i always knew Allen has a pervert mind, the same goes for Kanda, distracting him while he was reading aloud..xxD and i first thought the Finder and Lavi had seen them kissing, but they keep it quite good a secret i am happy i could review every chapter ,although i am a bit sad the kiss chasing stopped xxD, and i hope other readers will like your story as well!

go Riyo-sama!