Woww! I really enjoyed reading your fic.

At first her crying made my chest hurt (I mean my heart pervs, lol jk I doubt you thought "that") I mean I ship Allen and lenalee but lo fau doesn't deserve to have to watch her crush and his gf do that lol but after she said it wasn't sadness but happiness for them that she was crying and she found a guy too I felt soooo much happier with this lol

Love the book -sniffles- poor Lou fa

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that was a cute but sad story xD
At least she found a finder of her own :D

it's interesting to see this particular angle on Allen and Lenalee's activities- different from other sotries and well written
love it

So hot. So hot.

Great story! I love Allena oneshots and that one was gooood! Keep up the good work! _

i'm half and half about this. i am glad that lou fa was able to see that allen and lenalee had something that fulfilled them, which is each other. and their love-making was very raw, passioniate, and well-done. however, i thought much of the dialogue was way out of character, especially allen's and lenalee's. however, if you didn't intend for them to stay in character, then i guess i have no complaints. but an OOC warning at the beginning would have helped. thanks for sharing this!

I really need shower everytime I read this. Can't stop the nosebleed...

I like how you made this lemon a lemon without any vulgar words. This makes this fic different pr0n.

As much as I love lemons Sigh, if only those other AxL lemons would be not be so pr0n-like...

Bravo! (claps) :D

I was giggling at Rou-fa all the way, espeacially her thoughts ;D

Tho i wondered if you knew that Rou-Fa is also older than Allen...She was 18 when she met him :p (not that it really matters...two years is nothing)

anyway, keep up the good work!

You know, you where right, I completely love this story too, I really like the way it turned out, most of people made Lo Fa's like crazy-jealous-bitch , but in this I think Lo Fa its really madure and nice, just the way it should be . poor Lavi, hes an ass here, but Allen and Lenalee n.n kyaa so cute, thats really a kick-ass love -w- Its the first time I heard about what a Voyeur is, guess every day you learn something new, thanks for another great story I enjoy it, and you also like Pandort Hearts! awesome jajajaa whats next Full Metal ALchemist? XD anyway great story

sorry I end up writing a lot gomen

That was the best Allena fic that I've read so far! X3 And I find it harder to despise Lou Fa after this (cuz I know she doesn't LOVE allen) I also have a Lavi complex. He's one of my favorite characters but on the other hand he's falling for lenalee. That'll make it harder for him (not to mention lena and allen) in the future GAH SO CONFUSING ok [/rant] XD haha anyways BEST FIC EVAR *favorites*

I only have one thing to point out: "Allen embraced me tightly, and then motioned ..."-I don't think Allen is someone that could easily hug a girl for greeting.

The rest of the story was GOOD and the title suit the story.

Keep writing!

This is a good story. Please make some more. Allen and Lenalee forever.