okay, lucy and edmund's chapters are awesome! please keep writing! and i really, really wish u would write more of this plot...

yeah, i imagine it would be hard 4 edmund especially, both in narnia at first, and in england at first too. and i think this chapter is awesome, by the way. and i really like fics about others wondering at the changes in those who have been to narnia, especially edmund and eustace. keep writing. :)

I liked how you had Edmund comfort her

Great idea for Edmund, nice job showing his growth as a person

That would explain what happened to her in the books

Great line about the King of all kings

These are very well done! Susan's chapter was quite good. You did a lovely job portraying their return to England, which is similar to the Christian's challenge to live the virtues of God's Kingdom in the small world of our sojourn.

Dang. That was perfect placement with the last quote. Amazing.

This is brilliant beyond words. I. Love. It.

I love the character development in this story.

Haha! You haven't done him justice . . . but neither have they! Haha! Just kidding, I think this came out very well. Especially the ending. All these things might be difficult at first, but if your like Edmund, someone who believes in justice, then like him, you won't complain. Because that thing; whatever it is your fighting for or trying to prove (all the right things), is something very much deserved. Awesome chapter. Love Edmund! Oh, and I really loved the previous ones, too. Lucy next, now.

I liked this, I think you captured the characters well.
Bless you.

I like this story. I'd never actually stopped and thought about what it would be like for them after they came back to England.

On the wall of my chemistry teacher's room, he had a quote about courage. "Courage isn't the lack of fear, that would be lack of intelligence. Courage is knowing what to do with fear." I thought that went nicely with this chapter. :-)

Keep writing!

~Amanda

I read my way through all 4 chapters and they were all so good!

Peter seeing his return as a challenge was very in-character and realistic.

I liked Susan's especially the last line which was so striking and perfect (and I always thought it made sense she absorbed herself in our world because she missed Narnia rather than just indifference, you portrayed that feeling well).

Interesting take on Edmund; in some ways his first return must have been the hardest because he changed so much; the fight scenes made me laugh; the three of them beating up bullies single-handedly with no effort.

Lucy's fear of being trapped was also nice and of not being able to fit in with English customs anymore; the talk with her and Ed in the Wardrobe was lovely!

Yep, so basically 4 reviews in one there, sorry I'm twittering: overall good job :)

I enjoyed this story! Love the look at how the siblings had to try to live up to their titles in England.