Very epic read.

i really hope you finish this! it was one of the best stories i've ever read... i can't wait to see the old man's reaction to lee's decision or kara's to lee's relationship with kat, and how truly broken she will be to find out lee was getting frisky while she was being raped! i'm an angstlover what can i say... i'm usually not into this long, complecated fics but you did it really well, i hope you come back to it...

Awesome story, hope you still plan on finishing it as I can't wait to find out what happens when the Old Man finds out that Lee is quitting the military.

This is so well written. I love it. Would love to know how it ends.

I have been reading this for the past 3days and all I can say is I hope to see more in the near future! The amount of detail and plot is so amazing! And all the different ways that you have portrayed these characters, phenomenal! Again, I hope that you will finish this amazing story!

Didn't realize I wasn't logged in when I left my review! Reading this for so long, must have logged myself out! So that last guest review is mine!

I really hope you finish this story. I would like to know where the fleet goes from here.

I also worry about kara's reaction to kat and lee since they were rivals.

If not a short summed of versiond be welocome.

love your story as always and btw this is my third reread so far.

Thanks again for a great read.

Again please finish any which way you can.

I love your story! I'm not sure if there's more left to tell, but I do hope you continue to write!

Hello, just thought I would give a friendly nudge and see if maybe there was more to this wonderful epic you have constructed? Love the way you are writing the characters and the Helo and Lee friendship and of course Kara and Lee. Since last update was 3 years ago I assume real life interference took place with the story. Thank you for what you have shared with everyone and I hope you have great success in all your journeys. You are a very talented writer.

This is really great - well thought out, believable character interactions... I really hope to read more of this!

I was just wondering if you are going to finish this story?

ok...where's the rest of it?

Hey,

Please tell me there is more coming soon to this amazing story.

Remake

For every new chapter, I take the time to read your fic from the beginning. It is such a pleasure.
I hope I already say it to you, but if not : Congrats! great job!
... please continue on ;p

I really want to like and get invested in this story. It's long, and I love long stories, and seems poised to be a big angsty epic - which is right up my alley. Overall it's fairly well-written, none of the common and annoying mistakes/misspellings/etc. However, considering that I'm three chapters and probably about 30,000 words in it's moving awfully slow.

Some of the characters' introspection is painfully long and self-indulgent and doesn't add much to the overall story. Part of this is because there's a lot of telling rather than showing going on. You told us about, for example, Lee's meeting where he announced Dee would be XO on Galactica. You could have actually written that scene - shown it - and it would have been more interesting.

Furthermore, you don't have to tell us in excruciating detail what each character thinks about a decision, etc. Again, show us with their actions and words (again, Saul, Dee, and Helo's reactions to that meeting). Also, all that head jumping is a bit dizzying. A single scene should be told from a single POV. A change in POV should be indicated with a scene break.

Some of the dialogue also sounds a bit... off. This chapter, Adama's line to Sam where he called Sam "sir" particularly struck me. Also, don't think Adama calls Laura "Roslin." It's Madame President and in personal conversation Laura. He might have said it when speaking about her to others, ie, saying to Tigh that "Roslin wouldn't allow that" but I doubt he's called her that to her face (though I might be wrong, haven't watched my DVDs recently).

I've noticed that you *really* like the em dash, to the point it's almost distracting. A few places you haven't used it correctly. Whatever's in the dashes should not be necesary for the sentence to make sense. In other words, if you deleted it, you should be left with a complete, coherent, and gramatically correct sentence.

I do like how you've twisted canon so far, and I'm interested to see how it plays out. I'll keep reading and hope it picks up. Seeing as you started this fic 3 - almost 4 - years ago, there's an excellent chance certain portrayals and writing matters have improved.

Thanks for writing and sharing.

Regards,

sbz