I actually felt pain at this short little one shot, which is a good thing. A well done story.

well done

crying its soo sad

Oh, yes. Home . . . in the one, true Narnia with the one, True King. Wonderful!

This is awesome!

PS: What is the name of your other account?

Narniafan96

Wow! Really, really sweet. I love your portrayal of Peter - and yes, he definitely is that sort of person. His last thoughts are really neat as well; it's so great that he does have faith, and it's so neat to see Aslan welcoming Narnia's High King home. Wonderful job.

A perfect, lovely piece.

Loved it!

Luna

This is just beautiful! I really loved the detail - the seconds and Peter's little reflections on his siblings. It was just so right "Peter has always been that sort of person." and the ending - isn't that what we all want - to be home. Thank you for your exquisite writing.

That made me cry. It may seem silly to say "well done" after that but it really was beautiful. Especially Peter's thoughts about Edmund.

-Ellie

"could that be Edmund beside him? If it is then Edmund has finally gone somewhere before Peter, for he isn’t breathing." Thank you, this was great

nice

My stars, that was GOOD. Short, but not overly so, perfect length for a piece like this. Very nice use of the present tense, lot of people use it when past would work better, but this was perfect for the present. And the bits about Peter's thoughts about his siblings... OOH, it sent shivers up my spine. Ed not breathing... oy. Made me see the scene from the book in a slightly different light. Oh, this was a delight to find. Very nicely done.

Good job. Wow. I like the way you use present tense, it makes it very urgent and immediate. Thanks for writing this.

Hi - Can you please tell me your new fanfic ID?

P.S: I love this story - I've loved it since you emailed it to me!~

From:

BellaVendetta

aka

RevancheBelle

aka

Elmo

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