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This seems like a really promising fic (bonuses for the war clans period setting, I'm always happy to see more of the Senju brothers).
Good writing, pacing and well thought out.
I look forward to the next chapter.

I really like your writing style! It’s very fluid and melodic—plus the characters and plot seem to be great so far too. Looking forward to your next update!

Soko is really into her training, I can't wait to see her kick her enemies' asses. I am curious to know what is going to be her specialty since her brothers are each going to be known for something in particular. I also wonder if soko will learn fuinjutsu with sada, it would be so cool.

Superb story, or at least the beginning. I really like the way soko is attached to her brothers and her parents, I really hope that she will manage to keep her hair long to prove that she is on the same level as Harashima and Madara.

it a really good strat . just make her little more powerful but not over powered
and pls update soon

Can't she be more powerful than tobi hashi? It would be more awesome! She can kick madara's ass then. Maybe that can be the pairing? Sokama x madara?

I really like this story! I look forward to the next chapter!

This is cute!

It was a good chapter, I will look forward to the next update!

Lol the story is really good thanks for writing it and I can't wait until you're able to write and post another chapter.

I approve.
- a guy

OH MY GOD, NO YOU DIDN'T—IS THIS REALLY HAPPENING?!—I MIGHT SURVIVE QUARANTINE WITH MY SANITY INTACT—SŌKŌMA IS MY NEWEST HERO—I CANNOT HANDLE THE BOYS BEING SO CUTE—HNNGMSDHBCK—THIS CANNOT GOOD FOR MY HEART—

Ahem.

That feels better to let out. So, I've been a big fan of your writing for years now, and one of my absolute favorite subjects to read about is the Warring Era in Naruto. So this? Zenith, here? This story just might well be one of the greatest things I've come across on FF in a verrrry long time. It's really embarrassing how loudly I squealed when I read the summary and saw your name stamped on the top of it. I am beyond describing how excited I am for this, I am seriously running out of ways to express this. Do you understand what you do to me?! Haaah...

Okay, pulling myself back together again. Thank you, once. Thank you, twice. Thank you, again and again, until I can make myself calm down enough to properly read the next chapter. You stay safe as well, okay?
-Nanami

(P.S. Thank you)

hey its me again! im gonna do something where i type little notes in notepad as i read, so then i can just paste my review in when im done hehe

"This is not the story she knew, so there is no certainty that her Tou-san will return from whatever mission he leaves upon. Every goodbye may be the last.

As such, every thought and piece of knowledge can be challenged."

ohh... juicy! the typical separation anxiety of a child, reinforced by the knowledge sōkōma has... like, its cool how youre writing this. uhhh like. she may have extra knowledge, but she is still in a child's body. and a child is predisposed to worry when her parents leave. i think it's lovely that her child brain is trumping the knowledge she has from her previous adult life; some reincarnation fics have the person Logic their way out of the feelings a child would usually have, justifying it with "well theyre not a child" and i think its cool that youre unapologetically writing sōkōma as a child. it makes it feel real; instead of constantly having to confront the fact that the story is a story, i can just read it and immerse myself. very awesome.

"No death at seven could mean Kawarama may die before that, even younger than in the story."

OOF! oofie owie ouchie. i adore ur self insert and i want 2 give her a hug. its so rad that youre writing a kid grappling with adult thoughts. i LOVE it. as someone who was aware of death from an unusually young age i feel very seen right now.

"That means any idea or theory can be challenged. Such as all that she had been told of chakra."

',:0 Tsume i am intrigued! are you going to say "screw canon" and rewrite how chakra works? or was this just a way to justify sōkōma waiting to be taught chakra instead of being a Masterful Awesome Prodigy Child like harry in Put Your Galleons Where Your Mouth Is (loved that fic btw)

whichever purpose this was for, i think it works as a justification. like, harry knew he could rely on magic working the same as always, but sōkōma is in a totally different world. her caution makes a lot of sense to me.

"made Sōkōma want to wiggle in delight"

I LOVE HER SHES BABY

"Sōkōma's top belonged to cousin Hatsune"

miku...

ooo an uzumaki! thats so cool, i dig that.

i loved the ending of this chapter, it was cute.

this is so cool ur so cool! im so engaged already. i usually only read fics that are already completed and i also never log into my ffn acc anymore so i have no way to subscribe to this oof... i guess ill just use ao3s external bookmark function and come back to check on this fic in a couple years? idk!

i loved the stuff about memory in this first chapter tho, that was radical. it reminded me of a fanfic i read for the hamilton musical, which i promise is a good thing cus that fic was rly great and i feel like this one is gonna be awesome too! btw if youre into hamilton the fic was called "feels more like a memory" by savrenim

anyways. yea i love the bits where ur self insert has the abilities of a child cus one of my pet peeves with reincarnation fics is tiny babies having the same physical and mental abilities they had previously. i took a psych class in high school and paid attention, i know thats not how child development works. and obvi ppl can write what they want and theres nothing inherently wrong with bending science in fic, its just not something i enjoy reading. so im glad youre writing it the way you are! i especially appreciated the thought about braiding her own hair; that struck me as both realistic and a good character quirk to include and it made your self insert instantly memorable. as a guy who cares a lot about my hair im really excited to see your self insert get real strong in future chapters while also sparing a thought for her appearance. theres still something charming and fun about female characters who dont give a damn how they look, but its hard to relate to them when the author makes that the entire base of their character instead of just a fun little quirk; i feel like most people care how they look on some level, so its weird how some (dare i say, usually male) authors seem to think they can get away with making a character out of a single unusual trait and calling it feminism. so... yea i liked the bits about ur self insert putting in the time to carefully brush her hair out and whatnot.

anywho- if ur someone who likes to respond to comments, ive got an email listed on my ao3 profile (coralflower). i think ffn will get mad at me if i try to put it here XD. you certainly dont have to respond, i just remember getting frustrated that i had no good way to respond to guest reviewers back when i used this site. so the option is there if you want it.

time to read chapter 2!