Can't wait for the next chapter.

I am utterly stunned at how much work and effort you have placed in both your original and your revised version. Absolute kudos to you, my friend!

Ok. This is meant as constructive criticism. If it feels otherwise it is because of my lack of writing skills and my mere bluntness.

Your characters are flat.

Over a quarter million words in and we have less development than the Harry Potter series.
Sorry but I said I was blunt.

Link is still the lost boy. Loyal and couragoius to a fault and unable to decide anything about who he is or what he wants.

Mipha-timid and meek. Other than her confusion on her love for Link we gain nothing about hersure Mipha loses control of her powers when she gets emotionally turmoiled but that isn't much given your Lipha take.

Dark started as the strong and true Goron who is the father figure of the group and that hasn't changed. Not even his time when he should have gotten his memories back changed a tiny thing about him. In fact he actively fought against remembering his past.

Urbosa-the regal tough mother. Need I say more? Always Utica with a sly comment but not pushing too far.

Then Revali. Sure you changed him from the arrogant narcissist but made him a little puppy dog instead. He is now scared of anything that will harm his "whatever" relationship with Medli. And can no longer find a place within the group overall. Had you flopped the Goron and Rito spots in the story it might make sense and give time to grow but here they are one beast away from there supposed victory (yet we know there's more) and he is as pathetic as the rest.

Really the only characters I find interesting are Hylia and Calamity Ganon. How will Ganons plot to turn the Champions unfold and how will Hylia continue to try to undermine it?

I don't have the ability or guts to write my own work. I have always been a better critic than writer. Nor am I one to drop a story unless it becomes so cringe I cannot continue reading.

Therefore I am not saying that your story is horrible just giving my honest sense and you can't take it or as I would probably do in your place leave it

Well, your work on it certainly shows! If I wasn’t entirely on board with the rewrites previously, I am now; your growth and the effort you put into this story is present in every aspect of this chapter. The characterization for everyone is top notch. While I can’t quite put my finger on how, even Daruk feels much more fleshed out than his previous incarnation. I love the buildup to Revali’s arc by highlighting his understanding (or lack thereof) of family. Having Sidon be more involved with Mipha and Link in this section does wonders for all of three of them, and the new mini-arcs you introduce here are great hooks that don’t detract from the main conflict at hand.

If I have to give criticism, I guess I would say that there is a LOT going on in this chapter and that might confuse some readers to a degree, but regardless, it still serves as a way to keep everyone involved in the story and all ties together nicely. Well done!

Just finished binging this story and I love it, if it makes things less stressful, you could always break the chapters in half and post them a little more frequently. That way there might be less to stress over all at once. I love Mipha/Link! I hope Daruk and Revali get there soon!

Things are starting to come to a head. I love how suspenseful you can make your writing; it fits the atmosphere so well and makes it such an epic story.
On a side note, I feel you should refer to the champions as their names more often than referring to them as "The Zora Champion" and the like. I don't really like referring them as those titles because it makes it seem more impersonal I suppose.

Yay you're back ! Better late than never w
The real battle beggins ! Oh I can't wait !

It happens.

I didn't realize you posted this hflckyxmgdk

This one was a rollercoaster. Had to chuckle at alcoholic Daruk and Octorok freakout redux. The deeper stuff tho. That's where it shined. Mipha almost walking off the pier was somehow really unnerving. I think it was LINK of all people shouting that amplified the effect. And the battle at the end was the hypest shit. I was expecting Daruk and Revali to bail her out, not the Zora. Though I should've known they wouldn't just leave someone helping them. All in all, awesome chapter. Sorry for the struggles you went through to create it, but it came together really well in the end.

Damn. Well I hope you can continue this story because it has been really well written. I love the attention to detail you put in to certain descriptions, and how you only highlight the ones that matter so you can keep the pace of the story going rather than dragging it out unnecessarily.
Over all, I've thoroughly enjoyed this story so far and I can't wait for it to continue.

DANG IT JUST REUPLOAD YOUR ORIGIONAL STORY ON THIS SITE DANG IT!

Yes! I'm so glad the Wolf got named Midna. I was actually thinking that Midna would be a good name if they somehow discovered the story of the hero of twilight haha.

Hi, I just discovered your story. I've so far found this chapter very enjoyable. You've got a really good technique with description; you this chapter the depth it needs whilst not being overly excessive. Plus I really love Revali's narcissistic attitude haha.
Though my one suggestion would be to add a synopsis to your story. First impressions are important after all ;)

Update the story soon

My goodness, what a good story you weave. The characters all feel compelling, and the emotions come across as vividly as a rainbow, both brilliant and varied.

I can honestly say that I would love to read any story you ever write.

You sure made a fan out of me.
-A Fan
:)