The story is not bad, is entertaining and funny, too bad it's unfinished

Love this. Well done.

I see where this is going. A rip-off of To the Victor, the Spoils

4 1/2 ft, 4 yr old? Not to mention that she's malnourished.

I love it.

Why is 4 year old Naru over 4ft tall when the general height for kids that age is about 3ft? Cannon is that he is short, and I doubt changing it to a she would really give that much of a height boost.

No lemons? Why did you mention anything of there's not going to be a lemon. Plus there's not enough story to make such a scene believable for me right now... Just saying. If you make a symilar Story in the future, please either tone down the whole story, or if you insist on having scenes where you describe people nude, add the bloody lemon scene rather than just saying things like "let's just say that during their shower they did not than wash up" and then add a poorly written add on tease. It's in very bad taste. It's crazy, since I know for a fact you can write better than this from a older story

Cerametallic does exist. You just added an extra "mo" in there.
Check it out if you want, a lot of speaker companies seem to use this tech.

This story is the reason you are on my favorite authors list, and please continue writing because I'm sure that most if not all of us are huge fans of you in some way, shape, or form.

ok so is naruko dead or is there going to be an actual sequel?

I thought orochimaru was dead by now?

or did I miss read that part?

I tried to like this story, I really did. The idea is fine, the writing is average to bad but I can move past that. What I have the most trouble with is the ANs that just show you do not really know the setting and the fact you took away Sasuke's only motivation as a character then had him develop the same way regardless.

Without the clan killing Sasuke would be a completely different character and Danzo would never have gained that eye... you even mention the eye's owner still being alive at some point early on. The fact that you made Sasuke evil seems like a shortcut to add events that would not have happened in your setting. Oro-teme could have taken ANY Uchiha child to get the eye's he wanted with the clan still alive like that, no reason to target Sasuke who had no reason to ever go to him or leave Konoha.

Setting wise you do know that Naruto is set far in the FUTURE as a post apocalyptic setting right? You know they have TV and Power and Radio's etc right? So explosive shells on ships would not be out of place completely.

Because of all this I just cannot finish this story, a shame really. If you want to improve your writing then I suggest remembering that all things happen for a reason to someone. It might be a bad reason but every person acts the way they do for a reason, they have a motivation that drives them. Keep that in mind as well as remembering what you have written about each character already and they will be that much better as characters.

Please inform me of the difference between no swearing and some swearing other then actually swearing, I need to know the difference. By the way be ing sense at first then not dense later is call becoming perceptive, just thought you ought to know.

fuck you you sick bastard next time you plan on having rape in your story put a warning on so i know not to read it.

dammit, i hate rape, pls for my mental stability next time when you write a story with rape in it put it in the summary or at least in the authors notes at the beginning so that i will not read it. thought i did like that you did not go into detail.