IT IS NOT "HIM AND JANE WERE IN THEIR OWN LITTLE BUBBLE" - IT SHOULD BE "HE AND JANE WERE IN THEIR OWN LITTLE BUBBLE!"

Sorry to say this, but you have to learn English if you're going to write...spelling, word usage, grammar - or else get an editor who knows English!

I guess Lizzy wanted coffee...

A minor question - I believe the phrase "Irish twin(s)" is normally used pejoratively. Is this intentional?

This is an interesting idea but you really need a beta reader to help you clear up the bad spelling and grammar issues with this. For example intense fair should be intense fear and piece steak should be piece of steak in the last 2 paragraphs.

All in all, keep writing but clean up the mistakes, that would make it more readable.

Those I find quite a few grammar mistakes in you story I really like it and find it interesting, modern and slightly more comical then the original P&P but still keeping the bones, those I'm sure their still more work to be done I believe this to have the potential to become a modern adaptation of P&P and a bestselling novel

Good job and good luck

I just read the first three chapters. I am really enjoy your story so far. I look forward to more.

Excuse me could you please make more chapters you are a really talented writer.

I am enjoy your story, I'm looking forward to the rest. I thought the part with Elizabeth and her mom in the bathroom was funny.

Just wondering where this story is set and what everyone does for a living? Looking forward to more

Great beginning. Keep going.

Looks good so far. Update soon plz