Wow, no wonder I've been disappointed by the last couple Volumes of RWBY. I read this first, but it was long enough ago that I forgot a lot of details. Still, just this chapter managed to have exciting action, innovative-yet-canonical uses of Dust, Aura, and Blake's Semblance, and a competent minor-character Huntsman. (And also a bunch of painful spelling and grammar mistakes, unfortunately.)

After far too long of putting this off, I am now returning the favor and leaving a review on one of your stories.

I liked this alternate timeline where team RWBY miss their chance at Beacon but still manage to band together for their own adventures.

I also liked how you made sure to include bonding scenes between all four of them at some point, showing us how they grow closer as friends.

The climactic battle of this last arc was awesome, an excellent demonstration of how our cast of skilled but relatively inexperienced fighters could use ingenuity and adaptability to overcome the villains’ superior skills and experience.

Probably my biggest complaint were the numerous spelling errors and typos scattered throughout the story.

HELL YEAH! Sad the story is over, but that was one of the best I have ever read, hands down.

Shame the story is over
At least it ends on food breakpoint

This is quite a nice AU...better than most of the others, which has characters becoming more and more OOC.

I think this is the best RWBY fic-the characters are well portrayed and we are are shown them walking a different path while staying true to the story. P a;sp like how the situation forces greater development and bonding among the team. I REALLY HOPE THIS IS UPDATED.

Please can you do more because this is a very good story.

This Fic is one of the top ten best RWBY fics. Please continue.

I just found out about this fic and damn is it a good read... really glad I read whats here, and I hope to see more in future...

well great story so far hope you continue it

Oh man can I just say I love this style of team Rwby, especially the way they travel around the world in a bullhead hope you start a new arc at some point :) maybe we can have them do a mission with JNPR at some point would like to see Jaunes reaction this version of team Rwby

A bit of a nitpick but you encouraged critiques so here it is. BEAR (yes BEAR not BARE) with me.

I give credit where credit is due so I'll admit: your story is engaging, the premise is unique (in a way) and this is entertaining. My only problem here is that sometimes your grammar, spelling and sentence structure slips. Here's an example (out of, admittedly, many): A sentence after the first line break contains this "..but, then a clap of flesh..." It's an awkward pause and you sounded (wrote?) like you let the reason for using 'but' hang unanswered. It hinders the reading experience and sometimes confused the reader. Write it like this next time "but then, a clap of flesh..." so the pause is right and not awkward. Other example is in the last paragraph "she and Arslan's Aura's subtly flare" is just grammatically atrocious keep doing this in the previous chapter too. Please check if the pronouns yout using fits the sentences as a stand alone. I.e. SHE aura doesn't make any sense now does it? Also, aura can be a common noun so you can add s to the word without an apostrophe. Which leads me to my next point, please use apostrophe properly. You don't add s to everything without ' . There's no such word as everythings or anythings or the likes.

I'll end this here and see how you'll react to my review. I hope that you'll continue to improve and be a great writer. EmKey out, peace!

I've noticed that you've changed the name of what I can only assume is Cinder's team at least three times. Is there a reason behind that or something?

I can just imagine Ruby saying Yang calm down have a snickers.

And I'm spent. Oh man, I think I need a cigarette after that read, woo boy.