What a disappointment of a fic, the MC is blushing stuttering virgin, what a mess and everytime something is about to go down the author just decides its the perfect time to interrupt them, this is a reason why i hate most Jap novels and now im seeing it in a damm fic too, so far there hasnt been a single lemon, HECK they havent even kissed im out this is just a waste of my damm time.

Why does he not use his Sacred Gear?

Yes this that will be awesome because we already have girls fighting over him it be pretty cool to see him fighting with someone over her

More please

Please continue this story when you get the chance, it's so awsome.

Seriously!? You lost motivation! Argghh ...lol... Oh well! I really liked this story it was definitely a gem found in the rubble of crappy stories. Hopefully you will come back and write and finish it.

I really like the nice slow, but nOt too slow, pace this story is going. Also it is well written hardly any mistakes or major problems.

Ya... Ya im interested in this story.

wow you are seriously adding way to many crossover elements that everything is getting jumbled and not going in depth enough in your descriptions or explanations. which really kills the interest in this story to where i have to seriously debate the time it would take to struggle through a read of this. which makes me sad because it seemed like this one story would hold promise

i think you make rizer too OP, well rizel just young phenex so his skill not that great to take 2 longinus gear to stalemate.. well its ur story

Ok what the Hell? Why does Takeo have to hide anything now? Khaos Brigade? What? Holy swords? Come on what is there left to hide?

Takeo's going to need a bigger house and bed. Aside from some minor grammatical errors, awesome. I kind of hope for some pup and baby dragon making happening soon, also that Holy sword user thing from a chapter or two ago is ringing alarm bells in my head.

On a scale of 1 to 100, a solid 95, you just need to clear up the Invictus's origin and clarify what it is, explain why Takeo is icey, and go over and deal with some words being cut out or dropped. It isn't anything huge, in fact if you went and copied the entire story onto a word document, and just filled in somethings, you could ship this to whoever publishes Highschool DxD and have this come out as a novel. It's that good.

Takeo should call Tiamat into the game and wreck Raiser. Then the ugly rooster's peerage should leave him for men that respect women, and the lolis should go grow up, Raisers even more disgusting in the manga because the, you know the gym clothes wearing, chainsaw wielding lolis? In the manga Raiser makes out with 1 while groping the other, in front of everyone! Creep, makes DBZ Abridged's Zarbon seem normal.

Holy cow! I wish I was Takeo, although his Hannya should evolve into something like Bolshak Dragon from Duel Masters, also dragon and wolf heat cycles, is it wrong to bang your familiar? If it is then Takeo should'nt give a dang.