AN/ Heya! I made a lot of edits to Dead Inside, fixing up continuity errors and some of the things that really pissed me off. Here's a changelog. If you want more in depth change logs, head over to the "di edits" tag on the ftpverse tumblr ("ftpverse" on tumblr)!

Be wary of spoilers for any chapter you haven't read yet.

Part 1

- Ch1 - made it a better first chapter, so anyone who skipped the Truth Hurts and Falling to Pieces wouldn't be totally lost. Also it's just, in general, a better First Chapter of anything.

- Ch2 - redid the Namine/Kairi scene so it made more sense (why would they ask each other if they missed the boys when they knew?). Added a Sora scene.

- Ch3 - shifted the Sora scene that was previously in ch2 here.

It happened over the course of a couple chapters, but I also removed the "Kairi forgot the events of Falling to Pieces, the book" because it seemed so dumb? So, she remembers that now. It's cool.

- Ch6 - tweaked the conversation about Deactivating Replicas because it was a little insensitive at first. This turned into talking a more about Replica lore (and Rewriting being a thing).

- Ch8 - the Kairi/Namine scene was edited, now ft a nightmare scene

- Ch10 - I wanted to pretend like Sora wasn't actually close friends with Namine in early FtPverse days for some reason and Heck To That, so now Sora telling Joseph about Namine actually reads like he knows her, because he does.

- Ch11 - made it clearer who Vexen was from the start, lol.

- Ch15 - the Kairi/Namine scene (about letters) was edited so it sounded more like it was actually Kairi speaking? The letter was also edited for this reason.

- Ch20 - edited the scene where 17 tries to kidnap Namine so that Kairi was there. Added Kairi's POV of the scene. Shifted the Namine arriving in C.O. scene from here to ch21.

- Ch21 - Sora spent a lot of this chapter thinking about how he was ~in the way~ of Riku and Namine and that? sucks? So I cut it and tweaked the chapter accordingly. Oh yeah, and now he's actually worried to receive the news that Namine collapsed.

- Ch22 - Namine now goes "WAIT A MINUTE I LEFT KAIRI BEHIND"

- Ch24 - another discussion about Namine wanting to bring Kairi to C.O. Edited the Sora/Namine scene so it actually reads like they're friends, cut more of the ~in the way~ junk.

- Ch28 - edited the Xigbar scenes because what was originally there didn't make a lot of sense. / added yet another "okay I should get Kairi" "okay but please don't?" convo

- Ch30 - Brand new take on the Kairi/Selphie scene. I really really really love it. / The Riku/Namine scene at the end was edited as well to remove an unnecessary part of the conversation, and also start hinting at Alpha being, well, who he is.

- Ch31 - tweaked HB gang dynamics so they'd be more in line with how these characters actually act. Finally described Aerith's house from the get-go. It only took me five years.

- Ch34 - and again with the "I should get Kairi" convo. Now Riku provides the most legit excuse he's got.

- Ch41 - a small tweak, but Leon is now dodgier than he was before when answering Sora's questions about Zack. The goal here is to show Aerith's not the only one coping with his loss.

- Ch45 - scenes from ch46 were shifted here to make room for the Shad/Kairi meeting scene in ch46, which is really long now.

- Ch46 - redid the scene where Shad and Kairi first meet for a lot of reasons, the main two being 1) to tone down Shad's crush so it wouldn't make me want to barf, 2) so that Kairi reacts like a normal person to meeting someone she can't see.

- Ch47 - edited the convo about Zack. Rewrote it entirely, to be honest, but all the content is Still There the dialogue was just fussed with so it'd be truer to the HB gang I'm familiar w/ now

- Ch48 - had to tweak Kairi's letter so she was Angry, and also so it fit more in line with her character. Because the letter was tweaked, Shad pondering on it also had to be tweaked.

- Ch50/51 - Minor edits to 50, tweaking the memory scene. 51, like 47, was rewritten to be truer to the HB gang I'm familiar with now. Main difference is Leon is a little more protective of Aerith because Siblings and also Shad takes a dig at Leon.

- Ch55 - the scene from ch56 where Riku and Namine talk about the Repair Program was moved to the end of this chapter to make room in 56 for another Shad/Kairi scene

- Ch56 - another rewritten Shad/Kairi scene, this time because the original talked about a lot of things that were unnecessary, also I wanted it from Kairi's POV. was moved from 57 to 56 for pacing reasons.

- Ch57 - scenes from ch56 were moved here for pacing reasons. no other edits made.

- Ch63 - really just edits clarifying timeline things for HB gang and explaining why Yuffie doesn't know about Sephiroth.

- Ch66/67 - Edited the Cloud and Aerith thing so Cloud's A Little Mean, now. Mainly I just wanted to hint more explicitly at Zack. Also, Aerith actually heals Riku because I don't know why she didn't the first time around.

- Ch70/71 - rewrote these scenes almost completely. The basics of the original content are there still there, but... The memory in chapter 70 was changed, SoKai and Shadkai hints removed. Now we talk about Zack more, because why not. (Also, Tifa can see Shad now, and punches him in the gut. It's fun.)

- Ch73 - Tweaked the Riku and L scene so it's got bigger / more accurate hints at Riku's deal re: Larxene.

- Ch77 - I was convinced initially that even though 7 was a medic he wouldn't know how to use cure magic? By Nothing's Fair's rewrite I'd retconned this, but yanno, I might as well clean up my continuity. He has a better reason for not being able to do anything for Riku's had now. And we bring up R because I love her.

- Ch79/81 - Continuity tweaks to healing Riku's hand in 79. In 81 Aerith actually heals the gash on Riku's side now because there's no reason she wouldn't. Riku gets a little twitchy, which plays into 117.

- Ch87 - rewrote the Kairi + her dad scene again, completely from scratch. Talking about what's different would take a while because it's a lot of things and they're also all extremely specific. This is another one of the rewritten chapters that I think absolutely RULES.

- Ch90 - originally Amaryllis was frustrated and Alpha calmed him, but we all know it should have been the way around. So now it is.

- Ch96 - changed the Shad scene because Kairi actually doesn't have THAT much faith in Sora, so we had to account for that, now it's "I'll crush her tiny faith" vs "I'll completely make her lose faith".

- Ch97 - edited for reasons brought up in 96, also wanted it in Kairi's POV. Now features a really cool dream sequence.

- Ch100 - another one of those "I technically rewrote the entire thing but all the content is still there". Mainly just needed to adjust for the fact that oops, Kairi actually is mad at Sora now, why is Shad acting like she's not. (This should have happened with Kairi batch 1 edits tbh but, it slipped under my radar.)

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Part 2

- Ch104 - Kairi now shows up in this chapter instead of waiting until 107. Also, she's mad.

- Ch107 - Now Namine offers to take Kairi with her and they get on the road immediately instead of taking five chapters. Also there's a new scene with Kairi's dad!

- Ch108 - Changed the pacing / reasoning for why Sora stabs Riku (mainly just made it for ? reasons instead of "about Namine" because it being about Namine is Bad.)

- Ch109 - Namine still feels Riku get stabbed, but now they leave for HB literally immediately since they were already almost ready to go.

- Ch110 - a now-unnecessary Kairi scene got cut. Shad scene tweaked a bit so that he actually reacted to Sora vanishing because he barely reacted the first time around.

- Ch111-119 - all of these were completely rewritten. Everything is new. Everything was changed. (Except, uh, the Shad scene in 115 that one's basically the same).

- Ch120 - Since as of 115 Sora has been on the run from Maleficent for a few chapters, this Agrabah chapter had to be edited to reflect that. The Shad scene also got edits for continuity reasons.

- Ch121 - Continuity edits on Sora's side. The Kairi scenes are brand new.

- Ch123 - Relatively minor edits to Kairi's inner monologue, generally cleaning up her voice and also adding a few other smaller touches (including: her being a lil nervous because there's A Lot going on between her and Sora that the initial narrative didn't allow room for.)

- Ch124 - Some continuity edits on Sora's side. Kairi scene edited to reflect the changes in her relationship with Shad.

- Ch125 - 124 got edited, so of course 125 did too. (Changes in the ShadKai dynamic, etc.)

- Ch127 - Continuity edits to reflect the fact Riku's been gone a few days and not just overnight.

- Ch128 - Continuity edits for the same reasons as 127, as well as toning down Riku's darkness... things a little bit. It might not seem like it, but trust me when I say I toned it down. / Changed the ending for largely self-indulgent reasons. Riku reacts differently to getting hit by lightning now.

- Ch129 - completely rewritten. All the content is still there, it's just a new take on the scene, ft knowledge about the subject that I have amassed over the past 5 years.

- Ch130 - Riku was in a Bad Mood the first time around, but since he wasn't in a bad mood at the end of 129, there's no reason to put him back in a bad mood! Lot of continuity edits to make it so he's not in a bad mood, cut some things, rearranged some things, moved into the meltdown from a new direction.

- Ch132 - because Riku only talked about Larxene in 129 (as it should be) and didn't really mention the rest of the Organization, Namine couldn't vaguely think about how the Organization had affected Riku in this chapter! So we cut like five paragraphs of that, and lead into the Important Vexen Thoughts from another angle.

- Ch134 - small continuity edits and cleaning up Kairi's voice.

- Ch135-138 - edits to the R sequence in general, rewrote basically every chapter. Mainly just wanted to redo R's dialogue because I love her, and so this more true to her character, and her and 7's relationship is a little clearer. Also now R explains what she did to herself and how it directly relates to Xion, which pisses 7 off. We also get hints at Riku's darkness Maybe Being A Problem as well as Riku's desire for revenge against Larxene. Most importantly, I swapped ch137 and ch138 so that there wasn't an awkward Namiku break before we finished resolving everything with R, which makes ch137 "tRying" instead of ch138. Whew, this is a lot.

- Ch140 - Rewrote to give Kairi a different nightmare, as well as change up her thoughts on Sora so they feel more accurate after other edits I'd done. So like, continuity largely that involved rewriting the entire chapter.

- Ch159 - Namine whacked Riku over the head here and instead of just removing it I had them talk about why this is a bad thing,

- Ch175 - the original was good but I decided to add a couple hundred words where Riku reacts mmm more realistically to being offered a family, taking a while to be sure Aerith means this and also giving me the chance to really get into the nitty gritty of how much this means to him vs only spending like, a sentence on it.

- Ch188 - edits to Kairi's dialogue so she sounded more like her, as well as edits to her opinion / feelings towards Sora so that they were in line with previous edits.

- Ch192 - same as previous. Near completely rewrote Kairi's message. Made her less terrified/upset/crying and more just "I miss you, and we're being dumb". Also had to edit Sora's reaction to it.

- Ch193 - minor edit that's just "Yuffie was complaining about Riku and no, please, she actually likes him."

- Ch196 - more edits of Kairi's thoughts to line up with 188/192, so, Continuity.

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Part 3

- Ch215 - deleted a lot of unnecessary setup for Pacing reasons. Tweaked Kairi and Riku scene so it felt more like they're actually friends. Edited it so Sora found out about Namine sooner and also, so Sora and Namine felt more like friends.

- Ch216 - more pacing things. redid the starting conversation, so Kairi feels more worried about Namine. (As much as I loved her teasing Riku, it had to go.)

- Ch218 - I changed it in 216 so Riku actually knew where Namine was so, Roxas couldn't use that info to bribe Kairi in this chapter anymore. Tweaked the ending Roxas and Kairi convo a lot to accomodate that, as well as add in a few hints towards Nothing's Fair.

- Ch221 - it was silly to me that Joseph would insist Sora help them with rescuing Vexen, so now it's just "let's go to the surveillence room so I can tell you where Riku and Kairi are".

- Ch227 - edits to ShadKai dynamic that are largely just, continuity

- Ch240 - brought up some new ideas re: Memories, since I reread this and went "wait why didn't they talk about this thing." Also edited Kairi's reactions some.

- Ch241/242 - the original idea for fixing Namine was dumb. the binder plot was dumb. so instead NamiKai dances, which is, a thing they do.

- Ch243 - listen I just wanted to make Riku jump when Kairi grabbed him in the middle of this chapter

- Ch244 - Kairi didn't say anything to Namine initially? Idk how that happened but I fixed it.