Author's note: The soul purpose of this story is to raise awareness of a tragedy which is happening to hundreds of children every day, sweet little Harry is just a means to communicate this! If you recognise these signs in someone you know or see, you must report it before it is too late. Now, I shall stop preaching and let you read the fic. Please let me know what you think!
Primary School Essays
Name: Harry Potter
Class: 5AS
Task: Write a short account of your life. Include your birthday, family, wishes and interests.
My name is Harry Potter, I was born on the 31st of July 1980. My parents died in a car crash when I was one year old and so I live with my aunt and uncle. I like dogs because they can't talk or shout. My cousin Dudley often shouts to get what he wants. I wish I had a dog.
This is a good start, Harry but it is too short. Maybe you could describe your Aunt and Uncle some more? What would you call your dog? What would he look like? AS.
My aunt likes talking to the neighbours about other neighbours . My uncle likes drills and shouting. My cousin likes fighting especially when his op- oponett opponent is smaller than him. If I had a dog (which I never will because Aunt Petunia doesn't like them and she says I don't deserve one) then I would call it Padfoot because I often dream about a big black dog called that. My dog would be big and black as well and it would always fait-faitt-faitthfull- loyal. It would sleep with me and it would protect me against bad people.
Much better, Harry! This is much more detailed! If you go wrong please cross out your words and do not be afraid to look in the dictionary rather than using different words. I am sure you're aunt didn't say you didn't deserve one unless you didn't ask politely? AS
Name: Harry Potter
Class: 5AS
Task: Write a poem about someone you love.
The worst thing is I can't remember you
But I remember the things you used to do
You held me, you kissed me, you cleaned me
You sang to me, you cooked my tea
But the best thing you gave me was love
Burt now you are up above
And the worst thing is I cant remember you
Excellent, Harry! But check some of the lines because they don't quite fit. I believe you are talking about your parents and I am sure they would be proud but don't forget you have your aunt and uncle now, why don't you write a nice poem for them? SA No thanks
Name: Harry Potter
Class: 5AS
Task: Describe your favourite place.
My favourite place is in the park where I can sit in peace with no one shouting at me and no jobs to do. I can just lie in the sun and let the breeze blow my hair around. I can just relax. There are streams to paddle in and trees to climb and if I am lucky there are some dogs to play with. My very favourite thing about the park is that Dudley is not there.
Very descriptive, Harry! Why don't you change jobs to school work because otherwise it sounds like you are talking about something else and you don't want people to get the wrong idea. Why don't you take your cousin to the park sometime? I am sure he will enjoy it too. AS
Name: Harry Potter
Class: 5AS
Task: Write about your best experience
My best experience was when my aunt and uncle went out for the day and left me by myself because Mrs Figg was visiting her brother. I got to watch TV and to play with Dudley's toys! I ate lots of food and spent four hours at the park without having to worry about getting back before they noticed. It was lots of fun but I wish they hadn't got back so soon.
You have a very over-reactive imagination, Harry! I am sure that your aunt and uncle did not leave you by yourself and your cousin Dudley confirmed this. Try and stick to plain fact unless I specifically ask for some creative writing please. AS.
Name: Harry Potter
Class: 5AS
Task: Complete the maths questions off the board in silence.
1) 29+30= 59
2) 10x2= 20
3) 1/2
4) 16 divided by 2= 8
5) 10x1= 100
6)
Very good but please check question 5, 10x1=10. Write this ten times in your homework book so you don't forget. Why didn't you do question 6?
I couldn't do it because I have never had pizza so I didn't know what shape it was so I couldn't draw it to split it into quarters.
Name: Harry Potter
Class: 5AS
Task: Write about your best friend.
Harry you have not written anything! See me after class.
Name: Harry Potter
Class: 5AS
Task: Describe an imaginary character of your choice.
He has long, black, curly hair and he is always laughing. He rides a big flying motorbike and he likes playing tricks on people. He invades people's dreams and makes them yearn for it to be reality. He can turn into a big black dog. He is very kind to everyone and never shouts. He loves a small boy called Harry Potter.
This is very good, Harry! See now is the time to be creative and write fiction. I can see you do it very well and you have a good imagination. I like how you have combined the things you like, for example dogs, and used them in your description. Wouldn't it be strange if people really could change into animals? AS
Name: Dudley Dursley
Class: 5AS
Task: Describe your family.
I live with my mum and dad and my cousin. My mum is very nice and is always kind to everyone even my cousin who is horrible to her. My dad is very patient especially with my cousin who is always being naughty. My cousin is called harry potter and he is horrible to me because he is jealous that I have my parents while his are dead. Harry kicks my mother and shouts and swears at my dad but they are very kind to him. They say he cant help being ungrateful and its because of his blood. Harry's parents were criminals and dirtied my mum's blood. She doesn't like to talk of them. They try their best with harry but he is very awkward. He is rude to everyone and he beats people up. My parents are constantly punishing him to try and make him a better person. I know that it is hopeless.
This is very good, Dudley. Your parents sound like very nice people. I know it must be hard for you with everyone giving Harry attention but we all know what he is like and we are trying to rectify it. He has a habit of spreading lies and tales of mistreatment and we must all ignore him and try and help him. I think you are a very good boy to share so willingly with your cousin. This is a very good piece of writing and I will send a letter home to your parents to suggest they have a word with Harry about the way he treats you. Well done. SA
Name: Harry Potter
Class: 5AS
Task: Describe your family.
My family have died and I live with my aunt and uncle who don't act like a family. They don't feed me or love me. They don't spend money on me or buy me clothes. They give everything to Dudley. I don't have a family…but I wish I did.
Harry, you're aunt and uncle are very good to you so please don't be ungrateful. You also need to learn the difference between truth and exaggeration. You cannot expect them to buy you everything you see and Dudley is extremely nice to share his things with you. You sound very spoiled when you write like this and I suspect it was fuelled by some desire for an expensive gadget that you didn't need and the Dursleys couldn't afford and so refused you. You have a perfectly good family and you ought to be grateful to them for what they have done for you. If it wasn't for them you would be out on the streets. I will be contacting them tonight. SA.