Awww :')

How about you get rid of the torture part and have Pitch be the villain instead?! This chapter pissed me off! I can't believe that you had to add this fucking piece of garbage part into this story! This story was awesome, but now because of this part, it's as dumb as hell!

I understand that with how dire her situation is, and that there are situations that you simply can't get out of on your own and need rescuing, but I'm not sure that I agree with your interpretation of Elsa in this regard. In the film, the *only* time she gave up was when she thought she had killed her sister - the most important thing to her. Here, her first thoughts weren't "how am I going to break free of this" or "how can I use my powers to fight back", it was "I hope someone rescues me". I'm not usually one to nit-pick someone's reimagining, but I really respect your writing style and the rest of the story and feel it is necessary to point this major character inconsistency out.

Part of the reason we lost Elsa is because of her inner-strength and independence. I'm not saying that she couldn't need help defeating Hans, but she should at least be looking for any chance to get the better of him and make it as hard to control her as possible. He mentions her still having "spirit" left, but all we see to back that up is a momentary glare. She isn't struggling against her captors, pulling against her chains, screaming cureses through her gag, or fighting against her reactions to her pain. She is smart enough to know he wants to enjoy the suffering he is inflicting. That means she is also smart enough to know the best way to get back at him is to deny him the satisfaction of reactions. But there is no fight on her.

Again, I love what you are doing with this story and how well you have captured the characters. I am just afraid that you are missing a beautiful opportunity with your heroine to take it from a good story to an epic story. There are a million "damsel in distress" stories out there, but not many where the female lead is just as big a force to handle with as the hero. From one writer to another, don't short cut yourself or your story. You are too good for that,

I loved this this was perfect in my book thank you for doing this

I agree with you about Hans. Anna punching of the side of the boat at the end of the movie is one of the movies best parts!

I really wish that you would remove the torture part. Seeing my favorite Disney princess and the most beautiful Disney character of all time get tortured just makes me FURIOUS! *glares with fury Plus Hans should redeem himself after the events of the movie, so why not have Pitch be the main villain instead, maybe capture Elsa to lure Jack Frost into a trap or something?

I would love it if you removed the torture part and had Pitch be the main villain instead. I see Hans redeeming himself after the events of Frozen.

Don't get me wrong I like this story, but the torture part just drives me away. :(

Didn't like the torture part. Other than that it was good.

this was amazing and really great can you please do a shorter epilogue chapter! : )

Amzing

I really really loved this :) I ship Jelsa pretty hard and I thought this was cute and great! 3 nicely done :) I loved the small flirting and the confusion of emotions and the end was great 3 fantabulous darling ;)

Will there be a sequel?

NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO! PLEASE CONTINUE! PLEASEEEE! I literally love thos book with a burning passion. You HAVE to continue it!

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