An excellent third person type story. Drawn from several sources. Spoils of War, etc. It is still a very good read, even if you have read many of the vegas ones. It is a short story in full, so enjoy!

Outstanding (O)

Exceeds Expectations (E)

Acceptable (A)

Poor (P)

Dreadful (D)

Troll (T)
Please correct it.

Really you changed the grading? Really?

not bad, somewhat rough, and fairly rushed, but not terrible. i would classify this as a overview mostly. if you expanded on this, you could make a VERY good fic. but you would need to stretch things out more, and likely make several tweaks as you do.

but all in all, a decent little distraction to waste an hour or two on.

Great story thanks hope others who responded to your challenge did half as more Pam and Remus would have been You

Wonderful

Harry and Kara, well why not?
Especially since Harry is not a Kleenex man any longer.

There is a thought provoking article written decades ago titled MAN OF STEEL WOMAN OF KLEENEX.

Basically it proved that Lois and Clark were a VERY bad match.

First congratulations on a complete story.
Second, the harem/consorts seemed over the top.
Thirdly I'm glad you addressed the problems that let Tom rise to power.

Oh and the Los Vegas bit?
I just blurped past it, I put it down to a bad spellchecker.

Thank for writing.

Great story hope to see more from you soon.

Yes - PRIME Steakhouse exists still - and is where the story puts it. I've been to the Bellagio, but never ate at PRIME (too pricey at the time); getting a view of the fountain (and especially in either the evening OR at night; a laser show is added to the fountain) is ITSELF worth it.

I have one problem with this chapter it's Las Vegas not Los Vegas

well this was interesting but I have one important question you didn't answer in this story what was superman's reaction.

The first chapter, although not without flaws, showed promise. This did not... At all. It was janky and perhaps even juvenile, the writing, characterization and flow simply being atrocious. Work on it.

This story has good writing, but awful storytelling. There's no real plot, it's just Harry collecting a harem. And frankly, none of the girls really matter at all or have any distinguishing characteristics. Mostly because there is no plot, so once a girl joins the harem, she no longer matters.

Great story

It start good, not sure if it will continue that way. What almost through me away was the mention of moRon loosing his intelligence due to the brains, which intelligence? Is already been proved he has none of it.