ug...this is a little too much of a cliche fic...even for me...but it wouldn't be too bad if you had someone familiar with grammar look over it...there are so many errors that it is hard to even read, much less understand!

another thing I would like to point out is that both Bulma and Vegeta are really OCC or out of character!

The situation is so unbelieveable that and there is nothing that leads up to it! I know of quite a few fanfics you could take a look at that would give you prime examples of how to approach and 'bulma on drugs' arc if you want me to look them up for you... my pename is Angelstar...I just was is too much of a lazy ass mood to login.

I'd even go as far as fix the grammar if you want me to!

Anyway...Good luck on your endeavors as a fanfic writer!Hope to see more from you soon!

wow..

awesome...

I loved it...

how could you not love him!

*o*!

loved it!

I really liked your story. It was one of the better ones I have read. For not having to many chapters the story progessed at a nice smooth pace, nothing seemed rushed. Awesome job!

haha:) my congrats on a job well done. Although Veggie-head did get somewhat OOC at the end, it was still very well written. There are ways to write Veggie-head without getting him as OOC as that, however, i am sure you will figure it out with more practice:) I am hoping you'll take this as constructive criticism, as this is in no way a flame. I do like your story, nice length, but maybe a slight extension and some work on expanding the plot SLIGHTLY would further improve it:)

otherwise, this is a job well done:) i look forward to seeing more from you in the future!

Catch ya on the flip side,

Vahna~~

hey hellcat!

I liked your story very much, aside some spelling and comma uses problems I really think the outcome of the plot is pretty interesting and captivating.

I don't know if you've decided on continuing from there or not, but if you decide on continuing, let me know, ok?

Mikk¥

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Hey Hellcat! This is such a great fic! I loved it! It was sad and sweet...just how I like it! I even cried! It was so sad! Anyway, I love your writing style! I wish I could write something like this! I admirer you alot! Anyway, keep up the great work and please check out some of my fics! Ja ne for now! ~Syaoronsangel

a very excellent story.

That fic was good. I liked it alot. I really liked the very end with the kiss. I also could really see Bulma going off and getting into drugs. Vegeta really does make the best super hero. Much better then Goku.

YAY!:)) what a good good story :D hope to read some of your other work soon ttfn!:D

make it a sad ending with vegeta crying.

hey that sux well noit ur story it was good but the ending it was like , well hmm that stinx ya know it lool guys aside from veggie poo are jerks lol ok im done wit my ranting

happy! want a happy ending!

Awesome fic, that's what your writing you know. I'm always on the side of happy endings, but naturally it's somethin you and only you can decide, we readers can only tell what we would like. I'm hoping that you can bring it to an ending or next chapter (wanna know what's gonna happen) so PLEASE update soon!

hiya,

hi i like your story alot, its sad, and kool, but i like happy endings but like everyone else said its your call, but i prefer happy endings, i like how you make Vegeta he is soo sweet and i dunno i just like it! update soon i wana know whats gonna happen next