Hey this is cool :)

I've enjoyed your ditty. A shame there isn't more, but I can understand why. You packed so much into it, you didn't know where to go with it. Perhaps a rewrite where Harry gets some real life in between the chaos that are the movies? If Harry is to bring balance and magic to this world, He can add to it (whatever it is that brings true magic to the world, or unblocks whatever is blocking the true magic from the world) by becoming a husband and father.

Following, just on the off chance you decide to pick this up again. Because, you know, I'm hooked.

hope u ain't dead. like your story

Please please I beg you. I love this story- UPDATE! This is like the 3rd time I am reading this story and it is still just that good!

I have to say I love the way death speaks in riddles and rhyme

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Y’know, aside from watching a couple of the Thor and Iron Man movies, I don’t know much about the expanded Marvelverse. But I really enjoyed your writing and this adaptation, and am dismayed you’ve likely abandoned it. Was it because of the Marvelverse purists who want a regurgitation of the movies? You’re too creative and better than that! Remember, “canon” is loosely adhered to, especially by comic book writers. Thanks for a good tale.

...eh, not bad. a few too many comic book variations and interpretations. but considering when this was written? not too surprising. Doctor Strange and Age of ultron weren't necessarily out yet when you wrote those chapters.

and i think that might be why this fic died. you advanced beyond the movies too quickly, and didn't give yourself enough wiggle room to adapt.

since we now know the mind stone was actually in the sceptre, Ultron is fairly different from his comic book self. even Hela is different. the MCU deviated from the comics a fair bit, and you moved the plot too quickly, and thus could not compensate for the changes being made to several familiar plot points from the comics.

also it has recently been explained that the sword Heimdall uses to open the Bifrost is Tyrfing. which kind of puts a Kibosh on Harry owning that sword. then again i am still waiting for someone to have the balls to give Harry Leviathan. the frost axe from the 2018 God Of War that has many of the same enchantments on it as Mjolnir, and was actually forged to be Mjolnirs equal.

the fact no one has thought of this yet baffles me. as it is such an obvious and easy match. but i digress.

there is potential here, but sadly tapping into said potential would require a total rewrite so as to keep up with all the latest revelations from the MCU. if you were to reattempt this fic using what we know NOW of the MCU? then i think you would find this story much easier to write. especially as you are unlikely to overshoot the movies again, and find yourself overcompensating with the comics. which sadly just served to make this fic overly confusing in places.

you also jumped between character viewpoints a little too much, which did not help matters.

so, again, there IS potential here. so a rewrite COULD work. but its up to you.

thank you for your time.

Thor has a real relationship, wow

so Loki is now a better guy

you did well. Harry could probably fix everything but you moderated Loki is SO cool

Gary is the silent guardian Harry stumble in instant transport. pls add it in for nostalgia only god's would call mass conquest worthy of house arrest

basically Harry can focus magic without a wand. he could do this and more with his wand so his body is now a focal point is death a male or female voice and will there be romance why is Tony calling it magic Harry is magic Deadpool

Good start.

You do a creditable job altering the character enough to fit the scene, but not so much he's unrecognizable. Also, the changes his presence make in the established story are pretty logical.