Yuki should join her brother. Its always best to stick with family whenever things look grim and depressed. Update soon!

Can you please do more it's very good but are you really going to do him and that other girl or is it just how it's going to start and all

LOVE IT! updaTE SOON!

This is wonderful! Please continue!

Nice, keep going! :D

I don't want toria be rude, but... ¿¡PODI' ACTUALIZAR DE UNA VEZ EN TU PERRA VIDA!?

雨 Ame

That chapter was so sweet, Ame lookimg out for his sister. Can't wait to see more.

Yoooo, this was heartbreaking. And she broke bones too. Cant believe Ame found her since he left the normal life.

Aww. Sad. Well, sad that she refuses to stay in the forests with him, even though she wants to. The writing is so beautifully done, and sounds almost exactly the way the movie is. Keep it up please!

Please update soon! Love this story :3

First note, the entire story is in bold font: you may want to fix that. Also, every time Ame says something, there's no dialogue. The document writer sometimes omits chunks of the writing, so you may want to check on that.
I wish I could say more about this chapter. You incorporate a lot of Yuki's feelings quite nicely, but the formatting and textual errors make it very difficult to read. I'm sorry if I sound mean while I'm writing this. That is not my intention at all. I'm critiquing in the way that I find it helpful, but some don't appreciate this type of feedback. Please forgive me if I've offended you. I look forward to more updates on this story.

Poor Yuki, I hate that for her.
Despite its length, this is a powerful chapter. You wrote the transformation and running sequence very well, and I died inside when Ame showed up. My statement from the previous chapter on punctuation remains, though its better in this chapter.

Very nice first chapter; you characterize Yuki beautifully, as well as the other characters. My one thing to say though is that you need to work on sentence structure, mainly punctuation and paragraphs. A new paragraph should start with the change of each speaker and you kinda just throw around punctuation like commas and semi-colons.
Other than that, this is very well written, and I intend to continue reading this. Nice job.

Keep going. I really want to know what happens next!

Please write more soon.