quiero ya el capitulo 10 quiero que naruto pate traseros y les demuetre a todos lo que es ser un kaiba

quiero mas capitulos caundo suben el capiulo 10 de esta hisoria quiero ver a naruto ganar duelos

True life is easier as a kid but I love this story and hope u can continue writing it.

esto es increible que legado para lo mas genial del mundo esta historia no podria ser melor incluso si se lo pidiera siguela me encanta que empience la masacre

me encanta si pudiera ser mejor no sabria como es una gran historia ti8enes que continuarala eso es seguro

esto me encanta quiero saber como iran esos duelos despues de todo un kaiba junior esta tratando de llegar a la cima de la isla y vencer a zane en un duelo eso estara asombroso

Um... Hello

Loved the story and I hope you pick it back up eventually I see so many good stories abandoned, and it's a shame though it's been 2 years my hope are low.

This story is amazing I hope you find the inspiration to continue it!

update soon please. hopefully you haven't given up on the story

two years bring out the next chapter already

So, you've made a couple of interesting decisions here. I'm wondering why you decided to create your own OCs rather than implement other Naruto characters into the story. In my opinion, that would've made the story a little more interesting from the get-go, as you could leave your readers in suspense as to how Naruto characters born into the world of Duel Monsters would interact with each other. You've also given Naruto the typical douchebag-superiority type of personality, which I won't immediately bash considering you've got Seto Kaiba as his father. I like the implementation of the fear of ghosts, but I feel like you could have introduced it in a better fashion by only letting it be known later on in the story, maybe when Jaden, Cyrus and Chumley find the abandoned dorm and have to save Alexis? I also feel like your writing could use a little bit of sprucing-up. You write dialogue like it comes straight from the show, and even though some people think it's very simplistic, I actually like that. Where your writing needs improvement is more on the details, the little things like paying attention to wording and phrasing. The one thing that comes to mind is repetition. The easiest way to avoid repetition is either a) editing your own writing with a fine-toothed comb, or b) getting someone else to edit your writing with a fine-toothed comb. It's one of my own problems, and I'll often find myself repeating the same words up to three times in one sentence. When you read something like that, it throws off the entire scene far more than some might realize, pulling a reader out of the story and shattering the illusion of immersion. Unless, of course, repetition is being used as a literary device, but that's another thing entirely.

So. All-told, what I'm trying to say is that, even if you have some improving to do, this story definitely has potential. As this is only the first chapter, I'll have to keep reading in order to find out whether that potential will continue to grow, or will stagnate like so many stories on this site tend to.

Loving the story can't wait for the future chapters and cant wait to see narutos second deck in action.

Update please

If this is still being updated please do so soon .