I liked the chapter!

The only name possibly worse than "Jenkins" is "redshirt".
If one decided to name himself "Redshirt Jenkins"... well, that can only end in EXTERMINATUS.

Another good chapter on the rewright here looking foward to more

nother good chap

nice one

WOooo i love it, when you said that you'd be rewriting the story i was skeptical on how It'd turn out but so far its great. but there hasn't been an update in a while i hope you keep up the rewrite and keep writing.

lol the prologue reads like a random schrew of lore thrown together with a lack of organization

Very good, I wish they would actually make a game like this, cant wait to see more. I do have one thing though, I play the RPG game and in the black crusade rulebook the chaos tech-priest is called a Heretek not heretic. I would recommend checking out the rulebooks if you haven't already so you can make the skills, talents, and traits fit.

Nice welcoming for the noobs lol.

I recently found this and have to say I am really enjoying the attention to detail so far. Makes it easy to get lost in the words for me.

loving the story cant wait for more

Wow, I seriously hope that Lancel gets kicked out of his little command position... if he survives. I wouldn't wish death on him, as his only crime so far is stupidity, but he doesn't deserve to lead a squad.

What an interesting take on the SAO world. I eagerly await future updates.

Decent, I rather like the redone chapters

Very nice work

This is my new favourite fanfict can't wait for next update.