It’s been a while since I’ve seen Titanic, but I like that you wrote a Thomas-centric fic.

/For the traveling man and his wife. Sleek, modern. The height of luxury. And to fit Thomas's priorities. Safe. Trusting. Consistent./ I like how you contrast what Thomas values in a ship versus what travelers value. Thomas has had more experience with being on ships, and knows just how important safety is. Travelers tend think just of luxury and comfort since they usually haven’t had experience with the things that have gone wrong that Thomas has had. Or they assume that since they are paying, safety is implied.

/Somehow he doubted Ismay knew how to balance the two./ Nice foreshadowing. And it kind of highlights the main problem. There needed to be a balance between what Thomas and the others experienced with doing actual ship-building wanted (safety), and what the higher-ups who wanted to please the travelers wanted. Unfortunately making the most money is going to win out over caution.

/Their lives were his./ I really like how you put this sentence by itself. It’s simple, yet profound, and is really kind of chilling to think that how well Thomas does his job impacts the lives of all the passengers. Especially frustrating for him since he gets over-ruled by Ismay.

/Perhaps it was this that pushed him for lifeboats. Not for him, never for him, but for the other passengers. The ones who hadn't the slightest notion of what could happen/ I like how this continues with the theme from the beginning, about balancing the need for safety with luxury that passengers want. Thomas knows about everything that could go wrong, has nightmares about it, and wants the extra safety precautions for the passengers, not for himself. It really says a lot about who he is as a character. He built the ship, and would never want it to fail, but with all his experience he’s aware that it could. And as a ship-builder he feels some level of responsibility for the ship.

/He could almost forget, almost not regret, allowing Ismay to use him like he did./ Very frustrating that someone like Ismay was in charge and didn’t listen to Thomas who knew better, and wanted to make things safer, and would have averted at least some of the tragedy.

/There, with his creation breaking around him, swallowing him, he was drowning with a mouthful of air./ A very powerful ending line, that really reinforces how connect Thomas feels to the ship he helped build.

I like the image of the ship throughout the first part, how she means something different to the various people of Belfast.

You highlight the myopic fallibilities of man in Ismay’s desire to make the ship as quickly and cheaply as possible.

I feel like you tell this story in a series of vignettes and its serves as a very effective way to show the passing of time. We’re present from the conception until the “death” of the Titanic, and throughout you show us how Thomas views the ship, how he struggles with the notion that she isn’t safe and reliable, how he at first keeps his doubts to himself, but even after voicing them is unable to enact change, and how he subsequently feels used by Ismay.

In a way he is a coward for not speaking out louder against the flaws he saw in Ismay’s plans, and yet I can understand his reservations, in a time governed by class and respect for a superior it would be difficult to voice dissent. You present him as a complex and flawed character and therefore I am able to connect with and come to understand him.

And we know he is doomed even while he scours the ship for the things he can fix when they return to Belfast. His trip to the third class is poignant as he sees the people who lives he feels responsible for. And h finds a connection among that he hasn’t had since he was with his family.

This was sad and poignant and well written. I was happy to have the chance to read it. Wonderful job.

Hi! I know Titanic and the story, but I'm not familiar with the characters.

The sentence fragments are brilliant. They read very smoothly despite being so short. I especially enjoy how the fragmented sentences manage to convey '401 was many things'.

I like the contrast between Thomas and Ismay. Thomas is a perfectionist. Ismay cares more about business. I also love the part about unsinkable ship and the similarity with branding a man immortal. Yes, after all, Titanic is a human's creation, and it's impossible to be flawless. There seems to be a foreshadowing around here...

Wow. Just wow. The ending is amazing. The emotion there is particularly powerful. The details about how Thomas is feeling when the ship is sinking. And especially 'In the shell of his ear, he could almost hear Elba's laugh. Nellie's smile.'. They make me feel Thomas' grief and how it feels when drowning in the middle of Atlantic.

Wonderful work! :)

Hi, Fogs of Grey! Rhino here –hugs- I am not completely fandom-blind for this story, as I have seen the film albeit many years ago. I also did a quick Wikipedia search to remind me who Thomas and Ismay are, although I haven’t a clue as to who “William” is.
The opening was a very strong one, reminding us that the Titanic was more than just a construction project. It was many thing to many different persons and groups, including the whole city of Belfast. I think there is a typographical error here, though. In the context of the paragraph, I think “She was aglow in the dull scale of Belfast” should be “She was a glow in the dull scale of Belfast”.
It sounds like Thomas was disillusioned by the whole business side of the project right form extremely early on right up until the end. I get the feeling he was focused on building an unflawed liner (I’m a perfectionist) while Ismay was focused on amassing the most money (The success of the titanic would bring business to their company).
A first-class gentleman in steerage? What an outrage if anybody found out. But that just emphasises how much the success of the Titanic itself meant to Thomas. While others on board were partying, he was inspecting every nook and cranny and taking detailed notes of what he was going to change and improve once they got home.
“I’m obliged not to say, sir” “I’m obliged to follow you, then” The formality of these statements alerted me to danger ahead. Then it happened – Thomas’ nightmare came true: “Titanic will founder.” My heart sank along with the ship at this point.
“Thomas stood; his hands braced him on the mantle.” I cried at this point. These words were filled with just such an intense air of hopelessness.
This is a wonderfully written story. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Hiya! Congrats on being nominated! I am however fandom blind. Yes, I have never seen the movie. I am a horrible person. Okay, onto the review!

I love your start! It’s fantastic. [401 was many things] seriously awesome how you started with the ships original name, listing the significant meanings it had to its creator. 401 was Thomas’ baby. A vision beyond compare. You created this great relationship with person and object, something I don’t see too often in the world of Fanfiction. You described the plans going into building the ship here [meetings were held to hammer out details]. How much effort it was to just plan the ship itself must’ve been excruciating and I can tell Thomas is frustrated here [he had shaken his head]. Draw a detailed outline of the interior. Making sure Thomas’ vision was perfect.

I wonder if Isamy actually does have any experience making ships. I’m with Thomas on this one. But I can’t blame Thomas being so frustrated. He’s building the largest ship in the world. [brusquely treading the corridors to his office] is a perfect way to relief tension. Anything helps I guess. But I can see him breaking down here [his head buried in his trembling hands]. I feel so bad for him. Thinking that 401 could never come home. His baby. It really breaks my heart too.

[Titanic. Grand, magnificent. Entirely frivolous] These are amazing descriptions of an amazing ship. But Thomas knows the risks. I really like how you’re developing his character. He’s a caring person, but very protective over the things he loves the most. He also calls the Titanic [unsinkable] which even breaks my heart even more.

I can’t comprehend what exactly was going through his head when the ship started to sink. His baby was dying and all the years of work and hours of pulling hair out all went down the drain or ocean. It really is very tragic. And of course at the end, even the creator must go down with his ship. He probably does feel guilty for creating it saying it was unsinkable then killing over 1400 people. He would die with the monster he created. The largest ship ever build.

Great job!
-Sapphire

Hello! I actually have seen 'Titanic', but I'm not familiar with all of the characters or historical context(s), so quasi-canon myopic, I suppose.

I love the opening on all the different nicknames for the Titanic, because it highlights just how much it and its project meant to so many people. The "She was never his" line provides a wonderful mood whiplash that I feel will set a melancholy tone for this one-shot.

"...he should have known commercial was in mind.": You continue the somber tone very well with this line. Also, you underscore it with a theme of anti-consumerism/capitalism that I really enjoy.

"Were they not confident in their men?": What a defining question to Ismay's hubris, and what a quick, easy way to be sure to deflect any future blame towards himself should anything go wrong. Ismay's a pompous character for sure. I'm assuming Thomas doesn't have the proper rank and, consequently, authority to protest Ismay's foolishness?

"Recognition started in the shipbuilder's heart, chilling in its meaning. Their lives were his.": This line in particular expounds so much on Thomas' character. To me, he seems a thorough, concerning, responsible, and empathetic man who is just so lost among circumstances that others force beyond his control. He's both likable and very easy to sympathize with, which is testament to your in-depth knowledge of and talent for writing three-dimensional characterization.

"What are you Thomas? An idealist?" / "Worse yet, I'm a perfectionist.": A brilliantly witty and barbed reply on Thomas' part. Personally, I'd take a perfectionist/idealist over an arrogant show-horse any day.

Again, I'm really enjoying just how much care Thomas puts into the lives of those under his jurisdiction, even the simple tugboat man. That speaks of a man of honest and noble character, of which the Titanic needed more in, around, and after its planning.

The descriptions of Thomas' family and his emotions concerning them are beautifully written, poignant, and tragic. That one paragraph adds so much more depth to the imminent disaster of the Titanic.

"Any damage at sea was serious...": An unfortunately true statement.

"Something sat, coiled at the back of his spine...": This entire paragraph does a fantastic job of communicating, through anthropomorphism, the gravity, fear, and tension of what Thomas (and the other passengers) feel at that critical moment on the Titanic when everything goes wrong. The brief sentences also give the sense of anxiety, of someone's heart pounding as their mind goes into overdrive.

Thomas' thoughts at the end are simply heartrending; your word-choice is full of emotion, especially in the passages where he is, again, remembering his family. Those same emotions also occurs when he realizes his doom, and kudos to you for writing him as standing, per se, like a man and facing the end despite his fear.

"...he was drowning with a mouthful of air.": An incredibly powerful end sentence, especially given the amount of irony in that statement.

Nitpicks (SPaG):

- "...could-heaven forbid-be...": I know what you meant here, but since the dashes look like hyphens, it reads like "could-heaven" and "forbid-be" are each their own terms.

- "...risk-a calculated risk-he thought...": Same issue as above.

A fantastic, doleful one-shot that is pleasure to read. Excellent work!

Hi there! Congratulations on being nominated for best one-shot in the Reviews Lounge, Too Reviews Choice Awards!

I am definitely not fandom blind when it comes to Titanic. I have watched tons of historical documentaries, read tons of articles, and seen James Cameron's epic movie tons of times. I pretty much know Titanic. This is definitely a great recounting of her history. You take a minor character who actually plays the most significant part in her creation and show how he views her. She's not the pride of the White Star lines, or what society deserves. She's just 401...a ship he helps build but which ((was never his.))
I really love this opening section here: ((401 was many things. Harland & Wolff's pride. White Star's investment. The foreman's success. The sweat of three thousand.)). You neatly define what the Titanic means to lots of people. To Thomas, she's number 401. She's a testament of engineering, of taking things to the next level. He also sees her flaws, though. He knows she has cracks in her inner linings, he sees the minuscule cuts that mar her seeming perfection and which go against the belief that she's this unbeatable entity. However, she's (not his) and he has little say in how to protect her passengers from calamity should the unthinkable occur.

The beginning of the end here: ((Ismay quickly displaced the idea of having enough room in the lifeboats for every passenger.)). Human error and good ole fate was completely at fault for the sinking of the Titanic. Her entire design, the sacrifice of the lifeboats, the repeated statements and belief she was (unsinkable), the lack of proper equipment, news about the icebergs not being shared, the call for more speed, not realizing the obscurity of the horizon because of the differing temperatures of the water...it was all a case of human error and fate intermingling in one catastrophic event.

This here: ((Titanic. Grand, magnificent. Entirely frivolous, if Thomas allowed himself a thought.)) absolutely sums up what the Titanic was exquisitely. She's a beautiful woman draped in diamonds and pearls and cruising through the world in a grand car. She's an extravagance that most people can't enjoy because she's out of their league. Those below her top decks won't enjoy her splendid salons or lavish staterooms.

This: ((In the end, he was here, in the middle of the Atlantic. There, with his creation breaking around him, swallowing him, he was drowning with a mouthful of air.)) was a great closing line because it signifies how much the ignorant decisions of businessmen like Ismay have led to the senseless deaths of hundreds of innocents people. It's also a striking testament of manhood that Thomas stays with his flawed creation as she breaks and tumbles into the waiting arms of the Atlantic, accepting death as punishment his own perceived failures while Ismay, who proclaimed Titanic to be unsinkable secured himself a position in a lifeboat.

Just a small suggestion:

((Thomas stood; his hands braced him on the mantle.))- I think "him" should be (upon)?

In all, this was a fantastic piece and you definitely deserve the nomination. Fantabulous job!

Hey there! Your fic was nominated for an award over in the Reviewer's Choice Awards at the RLt, so I figured I'd pop over and see what it's about. Before I get going, I feel I should warn you that I have never seen the movie Titanic, but I of course know very well what the Titanic was and what happened to it. That said, I suppose it makes me canon astigmatic? I'm not sure. Hopefully it won't be a problem, either way .

Onward!

For one thing, I absolutely adore this intro. The way you phrase this just sets the scene so well and, while this may sound odd, establishes the relationship of Thomas and the Titanic. That strikes me as absolutely amazing not only because of the nature of the relationship you create, but also because of the simple fact that you make a relationship at all. Most people wouldn't think of a ship as having a relationship with anything, but you establish one really well. I love the way you seem to assign the ship a sort of entity through this opening description of how she's so many things for so many people but has never been Thomas's. It's just a really interesting way of leading into the story, and pulls me in instantly.

Speaking of characterisation, I love how you're characterising Thomas in this first section through his actions or, more accurately, lack thereof. He clearly doesn't think much of Ismay's shipbuilding abilities, and he's got reservations as to how well this whole ordeal will work out. But he doesn't do anything. That strikes me in terms of how I view him as a character, because it really starts setting him up as the sort of person who has his questions but knows his place and knows that this isn't his ship to help design. He doesn't like the restrictions on his ability to speak up, but he's not one to question it openly. He'd rather keep his reservations to himself for everyone's sake. I can only imagine the kind of regrets this may cause when everything plays out.

I love the way you slip the foreboding into this story. There's just this really casual, slow slip of a super foreboding undertone that you keep progressively easing in - no one gets slapped in the face by it, but we certainly don't miss it. Even if someone was reading this who was unaware of the fate of the Titanic, there is no missing this slowly growing sense of unease that you weave in here, and that is marvelous.

And again, this foreboding. I feel for Thomas, because he just seems to be the one lone man who no one else will listen to and that is murderous considering the circumstances. I mean, they're on a fricking ship that will have several hundred/thousand people on it, and the fact that literally no one else is listening to his concerns is incredibly frustrating. It's really easy for me as the reader to slip into Thomas's shoes and feel his frustration at the fact that everyone is ignoring him when there are so many lives at stake and in his hands. This is just...Wow. Way to evoke emotion!

Ismay is really driving me crazy this whole time. I can totally feel Thomas' pain and frustration because you make it our own - you make it so that the reader is there and really feeling like they're a part of the story, not some ghost on the sideline quietly observing to see how things turn out. We are there, and we are sharing Thomas' foreboding knowledge that they are just tempting fate and no one will listen. It's killer because, from both the point of view of Thomas and from the view of us as readers who know that they will regret this rather egregious oversight, we just really want to shake them into listening but there's no changing the story or the past and it's just really tragic.

Again, the way that he's making these notes, making these comments. It makes me want to scream for Thomas' sake. He /knows/ what's coming. He knows and /no one/ will listen, and it just gives this really intense feeling of screaming at a brick wall because no progress is being made. The fact that this is just another instance of the stupid majority's voice screaming over the sane minority kills me because there's just this inherent human desire to save people from their own idiocy in some ways, I think, and you are doing a great job of invoking that desire by making readers want to just scream at the screen until the characters hear.

Still loving how you're characterising Thomas here as we're getting close to both the literal and figurative end. He's afraid, but not for him. Instead he's afraid for all the masses who keep treating him as an idiot and a heretic and ignoring his warnings, and to me that shows exactly the kind of man he is more than anything else. People are ignoring him and degrading his opinion and basically turning him into the human slime ball, and he /still/ is trying to help them out first and fighting to save their lives when they don't even acknowledge that they're in danger. That kind of selflessness is...Wow. Just wow.

And now they're on the voyage, and I think this has to be my favorite part of the piece. I love this bittersweet feeling that''s just oozing out of the moment. Thomas is well aware of the fact that he's on a likely doomed ship and headed towards (I assume) home with the knowledge that it's a destination he may never reach. But he also knows that he can't change anything anymore, and all he can do is the best he can and make himself remember home. This scene of this higher class gentlemen mixing with the lower class where his heart and soul belong is just absolutely wrenching tome, because it feels so much like it's a last desperate grab for comfort. He knows what's coming, and all he has is to hope it will not arrive too soon and dream of his home. The beauty of that is just stunning. WOW.

And then the man comes to get him and it's all over but the crying and Thomas knows it but doesn't acknowledge it. Again, that strength is flooring. Again, this pain and this foreboding and this feeling of knowing that they have no hope but still coming anyway...He's just so clearly and obviously aware of what's going on and the fact that now they know they should have listened to him, but he's not freaking out or gloating or anything. He's going in with this dignified resolve and I love it.

This scene, this simple scene here towards the end. There's little drama. Just dread. Just sorrow. He knew this was coming and now it has come, and he knows that everyone is doomed and the weight of that knowledge is suffocating. I don't want it to happen, and he doesn't, but everyone knows that there is no longer any stopping it. They've made this mess, and now they must work through it, and that is just...Wow. This is so, so painful.

And this ending just solidifies it all. The image of Thomas just standing there alone and thinking of home and drowning on air is so murderously, tragically beautiful and painful all at once and I'm feeling everything but still feeling nothing and just wow. The sheer emotion of this scene. It just oozes this feeling of regret, of pain, and ultimately of sorrow and resignation. He knows it's over. He knows they could have stopped this, and he's wondering if there's anything else he could have done because by not convincing them to add more lifeboats, he knows that he has made this hellish problem as well. He cannot separate himself from the situation, and that is just so unbearably sad that it burns. It's the end and he knows it and he can't change it, and all he can do now is just wait for the end and remember brighter days.

Ultimately, this piece is heartbreaking. I absolutely love your use of emotion, of non-dramatic and simple explanations to convey these complex emotions, the subtle weaving of dread, and even the quiet hints of hope you shift in as well. The whole thing is just so, so bittersweet and tragically beautiful, and I absolutely love it. This is brilliant. Thank you so much for posting, and please keep up the amazing work. Bravo!

Bookworm

Hi,

The fragmented sentences at the beginning were an excellent choice to convey a tone, I don’t know quite how, but it just suited the work very well. It was better in some places than others, though where it didn't quite work it didn't drag the work down at all. You conveyed Thomas’s worry and his almost attachment to 401 very well and it felt as though the piece was his thoughts, recounting a time that has been lost to him.

(Not cowardice. Not fear. Something sharper and far more final. Recognition started in the shipbuilder’s heart, chilling in its meaning. Their lives were his.) This sudden change in Thomas’s character did not sit quite right with me as the beginning conveyed a kind and gentle soul. If you were going for Thomas suddenly locking away his emotions ad stopping himself caring, then you have done that very well.

(“Even as with a divided population.”) I felt that that the ‘as’ wasn't needed as this part doesn't quite make sense. A small thing, really and the vast majority of your spelling/grammar was excellent!

The piece especially works with the reader having the hindsight, which put me much more firmly for Thomas, although he is still a sympathetic character over Ismay, even without that knowledge. It is incredibly tragic to read. That Thomas was so close and yet powerless to do anything against the disaster. You conveyed the all-encompassing guilt in the final part incredibly well, it felt as though Thomas was almost breaking before me.

Very much enjoyed reading this :)

As a disclaimer, I haven't seen the movie for a long time.

Your choice of Thomas Andrews as a main character is interesting, given his comparatively minor role in the movie and his major role in the Titanic's past. I especially like the way he refers to the Titanic as 401 as opposed to Titanic, although he acknowledges that a lot of what will be done with his design is beyond his control: "She was never his." He's clearly irritated at Ismay's focus on business over safety, but can't do anything about it, and realizes his creation's potency as a symbol. He's proud of it despite the interference of others, which makes him relatable as a character.

The contrast between Ismay and Andrews is well-done, especially Ismay's money-and-headlines view of the Titanic and Andrew's quietly more measured view. He's always thinking of ways to make his design better, even though none of it is really in his control, down to the ventilation. I like the foreboding in "No ship was unsinkable. It was similar to branding a man immortal." It's almost as if Andrews has a creeping suspicion of what is going to happen to the ship. In any case, he's uncomfortable with the "unsinkable" idea since he knows that the Titanic is only a human creation.

Andrews' fate at the end is deeply sad - not only is he going to die a slow and terrifying death, either drowning or hypothermia, he's never going to see his family again. I especially was touched by the way he thinks about them even though he knows what is going to happen to him: "In the shell of his ear, he could almost hear Elba's laugh. Nellie's smile." His love for them shows through, as well as the fear and guilt he feels as his greatest creation is destroyed, and it says a lot that he chooses to die with as much dignity as he can, despite his terror.

Excellent work. Thank you for writing this great piece.

I love how the impersonal number given to the ship really lets us put a new perspective on the entire disaster. It's colder and when we think of how many people died, and how it relates to something like this... it's kind of terrifying to look at. And it's just fascinating. I love it.

Thomas is very well portrayed here, and I love that we get to see the way that he cares for this ship, this baby that he's created. And the sensations that you create with his viewpoint are fascinating. The ship is something that he cared deeply about and that he poured so much time and love into, and it was ultimately his own undoing. The tears at the end where beautifully done. Most impressive.

Really enjoyed this piece. Well done!

Cheers, dearie!

Hello there! I am very excited to be reading this story today - Titanic is a movie that holds high regard in my family and not to mention you really got to me with doing a little study on a minor character. I love reading about minor characters and what authors go on and do with them. Let's go on and read!

Wow, what an opening. I love how you basically summarize Andrew's experience in just a few sentences, and not to mention, they're very vivid to me. I can imagine him sitting in the meetings about the Titanic, all quiet and thoughtful while people take his 'baby' and mess around with it. It makes you wonder how he could've stood to just let that happen, but eh. It did, all the same. I especially love the line [she was never his] - tragically true.

Ismay honestly needs a good ol' whomp upside the head with his [unsinkable] philosophy. At least Andrews knows that human lives mean more than a ship deck looking too cluttered. I always got this sense throughout the movie that he was always wondering within himself if he should've done more to make his point, pursued the matter further so that his unrest would be resolved. Unfortunately, we'll never know *sad*

Wow. Just. Wow. This ending, my dear writer, has got me all teary-eyed. How the last thoughts of Andrews is of his homeland and wife and daughter. How the fact that his creation that he loved almost like a companion is dying around him and there's nothing he can do to stop it. How he's drowning in air. Oh, man, I'm gonna need a tissue or two or a whole freaking box. Bravo! I can't think of any other ways to praise this!

Thank you for writing this piece, it was truly a treat to read!

Your have a way with words... I felt as though I was inside his mind, knowing his thoughts. Thank you for the insight, the beauty of your descriptions. Well done.

When this was pointed out to me, I HAD to read it. A) I'm a Titanic junkie (the real thing and the movie). B) I adore Thomas Andrews. That being said, onward.

It is neat how from the start you showcase that Thomas senses this will all go wrong. It's like he has a sixth sense but then, despite you having him say "she was never his", she really IS his. He doesn't think, he KNOWS her, inside and out. Whereas Ismay can only see the headlines and the dollar signs and HIS potential fame (cuz Ismay's a bloody idiot, but I digress...)

[No ship was unsinkable. It was similar to branding a man immortal] – great line and so very true. It reminds me of Cal's "God Himself could not sink this ship"...I rolled my eyes so hard the first time I heard that :P Oh, the arrogance of mortals.

The image of his wife and daughter waving goodbye to him is so bittersweet. I also like how you paint the image of being back in Ireland even before you mention his family. We Irish are like that, our souls tied to the land. it's a mystique that only we (or a really good writer like you) can understand. So I can totally feel what he's feeling in that moment.

["Anything amiss?" "I'm obliged not to say, sir."] – oh geez, just say it. But I like that even though the seaman won't say what we all know is the case, what Thomas knows, that his sixth sense just comes right back to the occasion. He may have wanted to hear it out loud but he already KNOWS. This is what Ismay's arrogance has brought to them all.

Love that last scene—I can see it so clearly in my head, that last time we see him before Titanic sinks. Wonderfully written!

Hey
Firstly I think I should mention that the Titanic was the first movie I ever saw in a cinema - I think I was one and so it holds a little sentimental value to me. Therefore believe me when I say that this fic truly does it justice because it is brilliant.
From the beginning where you started off with mentioning the ship by it's number 401 rather than its actual name to the ending where he was slowly drowning I found myself mesmerised by your story.
The line that got me was when Thomas compared the ship being "unsinkable" to a man being "immortal" - Wonderful metaphor because in the words of George R.R Martin "All men must die."
It was so poignant that Thomas was so concerned for the passengers more than himself and I like the little details about his home - his family in particular was a very nice touch.
[The cold started again in his chest] I like this line the most of the entire fic because it so captures the entirety of his doubts that he has had from the get-go.
The Titanic story and so many of its subsequent fics focused on Rose and Jack that I really like that you diversified and spoke about Thomas. "Breathe" shows that Titanic wasn't just a romantic tragedy . . . it was a tragedy on all fronts and how it was caused by human error.
Incredible job and I really enjoyed reading this story.
Now if you will excuse me I must go and search for my Blu-ray copy of Titanic, grab a bowl of popcorn and begin watching.
-Ciao Mate