Can you make a AU in witch hiccup said yes to the king and joins the dragons.

Make that AT of hiccup and toothless growing up together include astrid growing up with them together as night furies, yes all 3 of them as the same species in the kings next with valca. Maybe half a desided to take hiccup with her and astrid was gain on board the ship to look for that treasure as well and when they found the sword all valca, baby hiccup and astrid got all turned into night furys.

Pleas make hiccup and toothless grow up together as dragons. Pleas!

Great chapter, although I was lowkey expecting Astrid to pull a Heather.

Wow! I really enjoyed your story, especially your take on the red death. There aren't many fanfictions that use the character as anything more than a 2D villain. I look forward to reading the sequel and seeing were your plot ends up. Great work ;)

You know... the beginning is kinda bland, add some spice so readers can actually get hooked in

Ok! I have to say I wasn’t expecting this. It was amazing and such a creative plot that you came up with! Though it would’ve been nice if you got more likes, I don’t understand, your writing applies great rhetorical devices that draw readers in.

However, I really want to see the success of this story, so I have some criticisms to give you:

Pls, work on yo grammar and speeling

I suggest you spend more time reinforcing personalities of the characters as well as take a closer look at psychological effects of the things that the character’s experience.

That is all! I know I was (super) late because it took me years to find this story hiding in a corner. As a result, I couldn’t give much feedback, but I still want you to know I completely enjoyed the story.

Ooh, good, my skills are finally useful. 'Burgal' is actually not a word, but a similar word, 'burgle,' is. You're welcome.

Rewriting peoples minds is about as gar that you can get.

I really hope that the "Awaken, child and embrace the glory that is your birthright." Part was a reference to Starcraft. If you want to know what I am talking about, search "Starcraft 1 Zerg mission 1" on YouTube.

At bonus chapter Hiccup's mother says she want come back, but betrayed berk. This is confuse and sad. I think i will read the sequel tomorrow.

And before i forget, this was great fic.

I think once you finish the sequel, I'll reread this story and the second one!It's my favourite fanfic.

I never review mid story, but I just have to. WHAT THE F***ING F*** JUST HAPPENED!? As soon as I read val's name I put my phone down and just said no...i mean what the F***! What? How? Why?...I'm done. I'm not reading this any more. It's too twisty. Well, mainly cause everything is coming together...words are escaping me right now. I mean what the actual F*** just happened?! Ugh, I guess back to reading I go!
P.s. I'm not going to stop reading, I really like this story but sometimes it gets really frustrating.

Okay... I like your idea... Hm... I already have a transformation fic in progress, but another could never hurt...
To clear up any questions, because I have had people ask me, I don't have an account because I don't have an email and my mom won't let me use hers, but I still love to write fanfics and I do so on Google Docs.

Hiccup IS a genius, and in more ways than one. It definetly would be interesting he he WERE taking lessons from Loki himself, and definetly a unique take on things from Alvin's point. If that makes any sense. My head works in wierd ways.

'Going off the rails on the Crazy Train!'
Yeah... That was the first thing that popped into my head when you said the fic's officially "Off the Rails." Wierd.