please update immediately

Your chapters should be longer. You should also lesson your author notes they are longer than the actual chapters i only made it to chapter 7 because of it its very annoying. And i dont see myself reading the full story because you talk to much rather than having a long chapter.

I am absolute happy that this story is not going to be completed.

You are overly fond of Ron and you always try to downgrade Harry at every turn. Your Ron is better than canon Ron and your Harry is worse than canon Harry. The only time Harry lost a match was because of the dementors. You should get an Order of Blaugrana from that champion of pathetic Harry story, Blaugrana al-vent. Harry is not a God but he is not that inept either. This is the worst chapter I have read in the history of fan fiction bar those chapters by Blaugrana.

In Harry's OWL, he got O in DADA and Exceeds Expectation in Charms, Transfiguration and Potions. That is not the grades of an average wizard but of an above average wizard. Calling Harry average means he received only Acceptable in his OWLs and that was not the case. Your opinion of Harry as average is only a figment of your imagination and not at all substantiated by canon. You obviously did not read the books or you need to read the books again. Harry is not the second coming of Merlin but he is also not the second coming of Lockhart. As for Daphne, the meanie, beating Harry in a duel, don't make me laugh. You're funny in your naivety. I accept your offer to leave your story. And I am most definitely not sorry. You won't finish this anyway.

Dude this story more annoying than the last time I read this. Why are you always concentrating on side characters and useless banter instead of the main topic in here.? try to focus on the subject here. Who cares how cream hates Harry or anyone he is a are only few stories with good plotline like yours ,so don't mess it up.I am saying this because I have read this story three times everytime I get irritated to no end when even after 10chapters it still hasn't gone anywhere much. Hope you update soon

Harry has always liked flying not the sport, that said to many other distractions for him to concentrate and seeker position, maybe hand the Captain position to Ginny so Ron can learn how to respect women. Of course there is Lavender a nice and simple out of the contract, and who is Evan really? Time for the map? Thanks for writing.

I sorry but Ron does have a point one Ron was willing to go anywhere after. Why should the guy do what ever the girl wants. You had hermonie say they should be equal. And dAphane left witch show she is the one acting like a child. She refuse to get to know her husband and want him to brow down to her. That not right. And Harry is wrong. He should have stay away and defended his friend. This blaming Ron her mistake is not right. She does not want to marry him then just tell Ron to sleep with levendor.

And dAphane is a bitch she refuses to talk to Ron do anythink he wants act like this is all his fault and spend her times flirting and dating his friends. And then blames him. You could have made this story good. She tried to date Ron and just spend time with manly him relize they don't work. And together they could have broken the contract. But this story is just about how great dAphane is.

good to see you back

to many fics i follow die before truely ending

I don't really care if he loses a match, but they are called HOUSE Teams for a reason. You can't be on another house's team. Putting your Billy Stu on the Slytherin team just deteriorates your story. Honestly, I'd just scrap him as a bad idea personally. He's not needed in the story and seems utterly forced. Self insert gone bad, perhaps?

Harry could get his ass kicked by a pure blood slytherin girl because he is average. No, no, and no. I distinctly remember him creating a patronus that fought off one hundred dementors at thirteen. Most wizards could never, let alone create one that could throw off one hundred at a time. He fought voldemort's imperious curse at 15. Barty Crouch couldn't and he was at one point Head of the DMLE, on his way to becoming the minister of magic. And are you seriously going to tell me that an entire group of students let themselves be taught and led by an average student. A group that had at least 30 students. A group with a good number of ravenclaws. A group that included 16 and 17 year olds that had to take their NEWTs.
HP wasn't average just lazy. A huge difference. Hermione couldn't beat him in a duel. The so called smartest witch of her generation so I doubt Greengrass could.

The guy who is widely regarded as the best seeker in Hogwart's history doesn't catch the snitch against a grumpy loser who reverts to punching because he doesn't get his way? This story is now off my alerts list...

You will not want to give me a cookie after this review. First you are not writing a Harry Potter story. You are writing a Daphne Greengrass story. Daphne was not characterized by JKR so you can make her as bitchy and nasty as you want. But Harry was characterized by JKR. So if you mistakenly arrived at the insane conclusion that Harry was an average wizard, then you obviously need to read the books again. Only a powerful wizard can create a patronus that can drive 100 dementors. Patronus is a charm spell. Accio is a charm spell. Protego is a charm spell. Harry could perform those charms better than anybody. That alone destroys your silly argument that Harry is good only at DADA. Harry in Book VI even cast a wandless lumos charm. He is at least very good at Charms. Your Daphne knows a lot of nasty hexes. But in a duel, those hexes would be neutralized by the Protego Charm. I will be leaving this silly story of course but I am not surprised about your Harry. You have been talking too much to James Spookie or Zaxarus whose Harrys are pathetic wimps. Calling Harry Marauders' Heir or Man Who Conquered makes him powerful? But those nicknames are true. He conquered Voldemort and he was the son of Prongs. You are pitiable in your ignorance.

I can understand that you don't like an over-powered Harry. But you are wrong to think Harry was an average wizard. In class, Hermione was first to learn a spell. But once Harry learned a spell, he can perform it better than any of his classmates. He learned the patronus charm in his third year which Lupin said at the time was even beyond NEWT level. His patronus was so powerful it drove away 100 dementors. His accio spell summoned his Firebolt from inside the castle. So yes, I will gladly leave your story just like I left the story of your idol, Zaxarus. Daphne can beat Harry? That is the biggest joke of the century.

Well, Neville also has enough money to compensate the Weasleys for those properties transferred by the Weasleys to the Greengrasses. Now that is a real Gryffindor. His leg is trapped and he still professed his feelings for the Ice Queen.