I was aware of Percy/Audrey but it wasn't until this fic that I started shipping them. It made me want to cry, and that line – it's like magic – was hilarious.

Okay, that had to be one of the sweetest, most wonderful things I've read on this site. I'll let you know that this was also /not/ one of the many fics that I felt like I had to drag myself through. You just wrote it that well.

Muggle!Audrey is common, but giving her a disease gave this a very original feel indeed. One of my favourite things about this was your characterizations - I became attached to Percy and Audrey from the very beginning, and I felt Percy was written particularly well, so good job on that. If you ever write more Percy/Audrey fics... Tell me.

As for the rest of the fic, I liked how Percy never outright said he was a wizard. I don't know why I liked it, I just did...

The ending was so very poignant and sweet. This whole thing gave me fluffy feels. Wonderfully done. Keep writing!

I liked this when I first read it, and I love it even more now. It's very different from any other Percy/Audrey fic I've read, which is a good thing because they all seem to revolve around the same ideas. Adding in the detail about CF, and Percy's struggle to save her from it was a very refreshing way of getting the two of them together. I also love how you characterised Audrey; she has a wonderful sense of humour, and you can see how good she is for Percy, and he for her. Wonderful job with this, well done :)

Are you serious. This was so awesome! I love seeing Percy in this different light. He seemed like such a prude in the books, and didn't seem to care about anyone but himself. The only time we saw that change was when he came back in the final battle. I'm so glad you explore this side of him! I think it's truly a testament to your writing skills that you were able to unlock a completely different person from this character, while still maintaining his integrity as a character.
I also loved Audrey! With what you had to work with, she was basically an OC, and you managed to make her into a believable character.
And yay! A happy John Green ending :)

What.
Okay, this was amazing. I really liked your take on Audrey, and how they came to meet. I like that it's not the normal Assistant!Audrey.
[Audrey cried. And so did he.] It's so simple and raw that it's perf.
I like the John Green quote you put in there, and I don't think it was out of place at all. The summary was great, too.
Percy was spot-on here, ever since the first paragraph.
I'm so happy Audrey lived, but I was kind of hoping she didn't at the same time :P I wanted to see Percy cope without her (I am evil, I know.)
Anyway, I loveloveloved this :) Great job.

This was a lovely, original take on PercyAudrey. Muggle!Audrey fics are common, but I've never seen a fic where she has CF or any sort of disease, and that really added something to the fic. I lovelovelove your use of the John Green quote - I'm a bit of a TFIOS nut, first off, and I really think you used the quote in a wonderful way - kind of similar to how it was used in TFIOS but not exactly. The fic was written very well; there were a few places where you skipped words (like 'take stroll' instead of 'take a stroll', for instance) but nothing too bad. Your characterization of Audrey was lovely, also - you did a great job developing her personality. I must say, I love the scene where she whacked the mugger in the head with her oxygen tank. I was wondering if this was going to have a happy ending or not, and I'm very glad that it did :) Nice work!

That was absolutely STUNNING. I love how Audrey and her father are Muggles, and that it was like magic and how Percy was able to save her, because this was so truly stunning and amazing and GORGEOUS I just... I was crying while reading this, because it was well thought out, the flow and SPaG was perfect, and just how you made Percy a lot nicer and caring then what people would really think was Percy made this absolutely just... wonderful to read. I'm so sorry for the run-on sentence but I really cannot display how much this story touches me without it.

Beautiful job!

Lol I love how their last name was Greene :) And hooray! A happy ending! I really liked Percy and Audrey :)

Wow, this was beautiful :o

PercyAudrey is pretty much my OTP, so I thoroughly enjoyed it. I loved your taken on Audrey; it's refreshing and the CF seems unnecessary at first but as the plot thickens, it fits into the story perfectly. The end was just amazing! It seemed like you'd given this a lot of thought, and trust me when I say that all of it paid off :D
Percy is written well too, as is the rest of your story. The lyrics fit well in this and you used the quote beautifully as well. I didn't spot any errors of any sort, so kudos for that!
I really hope he tells her that it was him xD

Overall, well done!

ohmygod this was absolutely beautiful. i really love percy/audrey fics where they have an unconventional relationship and percy breaks free of the rules he's always lived by and so this was wonderful and i'm really glad audrey was cured. i hope percy tells her that it was him though! :) &hearts

This is such a unique take on Percy and Audrey. I've never read anything like it, and I really enjoyed it! I like how Audrey named her oxygen tank, it shows her sense of humour, something I think she'd need to have to balance Percy and his general lack of one...
Your use of the quote was good too, fits very well with the story. Giving Audrey CF was interesting, too, and it adds a nice touch of realism to the Harry Potter world. I think adding a couple of line breaks at different places, like between the end of their first meting and the start of their date, might distinguish the progression of their relationship a little better, but other than that, this was very good.
Nice work!

This was perfect, and you did an amazing job with your prompts and Percy was just amazing in this. Great job:)

Aw, that's so sweet. I love how Audrey, so brave and cheerful despite carrying Bessie around, finally breaks down at the end when she loses her CF. I'm pretty sure wizards can't go around changing genes like that and that you'd have to clear out the lungs as well, but it's an interesting solution, Poor Percy, knowing she could be cured with a wave and battling his pechant for rules. You know he loves someone when he can break a rule for her :D

I cried. Literally cried. So hard. I mean this is just so amazing and unique an touching! I've never seen anything like it before and when Percy cries out like that... Wow. Amazingly written by the way. :)

aaaah! cute story.