This is beautiful

After all, who can go without a good, solid, "FUCK," when you're angry and in pain?
Can't agree more, reminds me of when I was 12 and had to go to a hospital for kids (as I still qualified as one) and there were only 5 year olds who shared the room with me and I was there for reasons I'm not going to say, but I was in extreme pain and just wanted to yell FUCK but couldn't cause the children.

In addition, the whole biting the wounds to get rid of the poison thing, especially long after the poison has seeped in, that keeps recurring through the story was debunked ages ago,I thought it was common knowledge. It's generally advised that, when writing scenes in which some sort of medical procedure is being conducted, whether it's professional or not, the author should have at least some knowledge of how the body works, or should just leave such scenes to people who do actually know at least the basics.

While the premise is... different, the writing is just shambolic, and - especially given how there's no divider to signify when different parts begin and end - the plot was all over the place. While I'm intrigued by the human-Titan things, the half-assed, cliche attempt at conveying DID, along with gratuitous, random scenes of smut haphazardly thrown in seemingly for the sake of it sans any meaningful purpose, didn't do the story any favours.

I do apologise if I come off as mean, that isn't my intention at all - this is just an honest critique of your writing from the perspective of a passionate enthusiast of literature and writing.

This story... it causes me such anticipation and desire. I like the format in which it is written, and the way you describe Eren's thoughts is brilliant. This is obviously very well written and I salute you for contributing this masterpiece to the world of fan fictions. The twist on Eren's other side was amazing. Your writing can be a bit repetitive, but your grammar and spelling are great. Your sentences, not all but some, could use different wording and synonyms.

Absolutely love it! :)

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PUT THR CHANGED ENDING UP

I found myself thinking about this story a couple days ago. I went to find it, and I was so freaking happy. Then I get to this chapter, expecting the merging of Pilot and Eren like last time, and instead I see nothing. YOU TOOK DOWN THE CHAPTER AND HAVE LEFT ME HANGING. This isn't fair! I NEED TO KNOW WHAT YOU WANTED TO CHANGE THE ENDING TO. I hate not knowing things. .-.

!Yes I want more!

This was a piece of art. I loved it. Guh all the feels...

IS. THERE. A. SEQUEL. PLEASE TELL ME THERE ISSSSSSSS...! I love your writing so much and I really really want to see what happens with Levi and Eren now that Pilot has disappeared. (;;)

Thank you for the excellent story. I was slightly confused but slowly made it through. I hope you continue writing good stories like this. But you might want to say the story is completed if it is. :D

OH. MY. GOD. THIS STORY WAS FUCKING AMAZING. I WAS ON THE EDGE OF MY SEAT THE ENTIRE TIME. I don't usually read this kind of story (thrillerish) but I'm addicted to it. Your story was fucking beautiful and I want to read more by you. Thank you for gracing this site with such a wonderful story.

Great story, the Hell did it play with my head though. I'm going to need something a bit lighter for a while, psychological thrillers always muck with my head a little bit. Loved the reveal that Pilot was the embodiment of Eren's childhood trauma and dark memories from the day the wall was breached, and, I guess all the darkness that accumulated after that. He was the darkness of Eren's soul. Still wondering about Marco and how he survived and all. Someday you should write a sequel concerning some of the unanswered questions. Regardless I loved this.
Sincerely,
-Johannes

I love this story! Thanks for writing it (: I was super hooked